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A girl such as I

Could a girl such as I
choose to follow and die?
 to all I've known
 to all I've known..

Could I take up my cross
And realize the cost?
 of my soul
 of my soul..

Could I step back and see
you smiling back at me?
 in everything
 in everything..

Could I stand back and smile
as you walk in?
 to this heart
 to this heart..

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Written December 9th, 2003

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  • Saab
    December 13, 2003
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    Good write, Ashinator. You really need to stop that powerful poem in a little space thing... It's freakin me out Great write here!!! God bless ya -Jar

  • welbis
    December 10, 2003
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    great poem - i had the same thought about the 3rd line repetition - but if it was a song then that explains it - rereading it after knowing that i thought it was even better - thanks for sharing - keep writing

    take care, gbu


  • crosseyed
    December 9, 2003
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    hey there, thanks for reading this! thanks so much for commenting too. I repeat the third line of every stanza just because it's originally a song, that's only why. God Bless ya, and thanks again
    crosseyed=D

  • Andrea Lynn
    December 9, 2003
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    I don't think that the repeating of the 3rd line is really necessairy. Great peom tho. I will look forward to more of them. Keep writing! Much love
    ANdrea Lynn