My freshly shattered soul cries in anguish
This wound in my contrite heart strangles me
The world half asleep, I’m left to languish
Limitless sorrow to extreme degree
Deep agony is fervently displayed
All of my effort totally in vain
My confidant so unjustly betrayed
Weeping eyes, deserting tears they contain
My heart is lost, eternally banished.
Hypnotized by the dark clouds overhead.
The sun has set and the day has vanished.
The black sky opens for my pain to spread.
Desolated, unable to erase
In his eyes I have become a disgrace
Author notes
I think the words speak for themselves.
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A contest entry
- Break My Heart by Mistress Masquerade.
600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 47 entries
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I thought this one sounded family an excellent write. Good job
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a very powerfully written poem you have here my friend... my favorite part is the very last line... In his eyes I have become a disgrace..." A powerful poem. I like it thanks for sharing this.
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Very powerful vision of a broken heart. This does fit the prompt.
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You're Right!
The words DO speak for themselves! I could not read too much poetry like this I'm afraid> I would go into such deep depression I would Die! You certainly got the point across to the reader. It socks you right in the gut! Good job. -
This is anguished and filled with the darkness of true pain, the imagery you used and the vivid words certainly do speak for themselves. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Beautifully sad and tragic
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thank you for entering! this was a great piece to read! nice rhymes! you did a very nice job on this piece, good luck in this and all of your other contests
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Welcome to AllPoetry
The words certainly speak for themselves in this write; raw and painful this paints a dark picture and blows the mind away with it's honesty.
Excellent poem
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