Stranded in my solitude
with feelings of aloneness
isolation penetrates my being.
All fear my nearness
and will not shelter me,
my hush has become thunderous.
Songs have taken flight
and laughter silenced,
I have settled into quiet.
My spirit has cooled to stillness,
I am neither living nor dead,
while I yearn peace and strength.
Then, from desolate loneliness,
and culpable silence, my heart leaps
slivers of light, when I hear Him whisper.
In a list
A contest entry
- Whispering by CarolDesjarlais.
900 points, ended April 9, 2008, 11 entries
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Depression!
I can so identify! Self condemnation, feelings of unworthiness & not being able to achieve as I'd like bring me into a dark place where I isolate. None can console, all is silent. I cry out in pain & His soft voice speaks. His still small voice penetrates my darkness with light! You say this all so well with the end of the piece : Then, from desolate loneliness,
and culpable silence, my heart leaps
slivers of light, when I hear Him whisper. Culpable Silence is a great title for this. We are culpable for our loneliness & dark silence. Thoughts precede moods. We are responsible for our thoughts. Now I can
& pray for more responsible actions & thoughts tomorrow & the days to follow! 
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Good personification ...
and then the persona stepped to the forth and reflects the joy when His Whispers make the heart leap with slivers of light ...
Simply divine.
Blessed be.
Myra
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myra
thanks for reading and commenting - I enjoyed this write. Frans
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Oh wow, what a phrase: "my hush has become thunderous. " applause applause
oops, check quite/quiet.
Gorgeous poem.... -
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I just love your comments - this is as appreciative as a reward. Your competitions was truly enjoyed. Frans
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Frans,
you settle stillness on the reader,
who concentrates upon the words
intently---prepared to hear
the whisper.
Remarkable!
Aesthete
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