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Don't cry little girl

I met a little girl
Her hair was dark like mine
I knew I'd seen her face before
But where I could not tell
Who are you?
I asked
Have we met before?

And with her sad brown eyes
She looked at me

My name is Anh
She whispered to me
I lost my parents today
They were killed
By the strangers
That came here one day
To destroy the country I love

I said

Don't cry little girl
I'll be there for you
I will be your sister
We'll make it through

And with her brown eyes
She looked at me
A tiny ray of hope
In this endless jungle war
She'd lived in all her life

And then, for a moment
She smiled at me
And fighting stopped all around
I hugged her gently
And again, she cried
For the people she'd lost
For the country that lay in ruins

I held her tight
While she shivered and cried
And I sang this song to her

Don't cry little girl
I'll be there for you
I will be your sister
We'll make it through
There will be a tomorrow
Just don't give up
One day this war will end

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  • TyrannyForestFairy
    August 11, 2008

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    Filled with emotion and comfort that could be offered to someone in such a situation like war....touching composition, lovely. Thank you for entering and good luck!

    ~Emily~ xx


  • Devilish Temptation
    August 3, 2008
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    aww powerful and moving write. It spills out emotion and talent


  • Blooming Poet
    June 12, 2008

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    This story is so sad. The repeat of that one line, don't cry little girl really emphazizes your point very well. I can understand and kind of relate to this poem. Thanks for sharing.


  • Cat10
    June 2, 2008

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    thank you for entering! this is such a wonderful poem! showing how war affects so many children, yet showing how just one person can bring hope to another! you did a great job! and good luck!


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    May 7, 2008

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    I have added this to the finalists list. I think this is quite possibly one of the most emotional writes i have read so far. thanks so much for entering. My best friend went to Iraq in the Army and he was doing fine he said until he and another officer went to pick up a downed wall and found a small girl around 3 or 4 years old scrushed underneath still holding her teddy bear. He said he just cracked because he just saw his little girl being there.


  • calendar girl
    April 23, 2008
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    I hope there are many more people like you in the world.


  • individuality gold member
    April 8, 2008

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    a good piece, soft and caring but topical too with war, we can live in the hope that one day there will be peace.


  • The Poetic Angel
    April 8, 2008

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    oh cuz

    this is so butiful and so you .. the loving caring girl that you are..plz dont revise it its butiful as it is...a GREAT write

    Good Luck in the contest

    love you lil cuz

    xxx cheeky xxx


  • Punjabi Putter
    April 7, 2008

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    let it rough in original, its interesting and listens to be quite authentic, I never read such an interesting piece called rough.... Good job girl, wah wah. Grüße aus nürnberg
    Pushpinder


  • Melodies
    April 7, 2008

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    I do like this sweet song more than you know. I can just see you hugging and comforting that little girl. Beautiful writing. Sweet melody that I hear in my mind.

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