The secret society awaits
as man grinds wheels slowly
moving in different directions
compass winds movement vary
prudence in wake rising
a coarse change in time
peace inevitable
when dominion above man
replaces man's domain
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Prompt Contest
Prompt Quote
"The caterpillar thought it had reached the end of its world. Then, it turned into a butterfly.".
-Proverb-
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A contest entry
- Searching For A Sigh In A Quickie~ by poet2angels.
475 points, ended April 9, 2008, 10 entries
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'when dominion above man
replaces man's domain'
i like those lines
to me it could be taken as God taking over or some other powerful thing that leans more toward the evil side. either way, any way... intense lines
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nice write, very short and to the point, the words go smoothly together.
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Very nice
I prefer short poems with no extra wasted words and this is exactly what I enjoy reading.. very well done. -
very well written
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quite a fine inspirational quick short write, although you describe your spirituality in quite a different wording so that makes it unique and uncliched...well done
compass winds movement vary
prudence in wake rising
perfectness -
Like it and a little conused. Hope you keep writing. Take care.
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The imagery is AMAZING. I like it! Great job.
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is peace inevitable/ hmmm, i don't know. But I like this poem. Some very cool images "as man grinds wheels..." Great line.
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i liked it, it was good
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wow amazing pur i loved it it may be short but its good um not to sure whats its supossed to eman our be about bu tit is good it would mean alot to me to have such a talented writer you to read one off my poems and tell me what you think
thank you for sharing with us veiwers
love your viewer
kathy
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This is quite amazing. I like where you went with the prompt...
TY for not being cliche'
Awesome
Lynda
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I think I see your secret society as that element of the world soul that knows the important things of this life, while we down below grind away, daily grind and winds of change, etc. The metamorphosis of a butterfly does indeed take a course change in time. Like the pic, too.
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I think I see. It's about our limits or rather our limitless possibilities, whether mystical, Religious or some other alternative state. I think some philosophies call that being, "Fully actualized."
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Hmmm I like the prompt. I don't know if the poem relates to it. Perhaps it needs another look. Good luck to you in the contest.
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