I go to
the poetry reading
at the pub up the road
and I wonder what I'm doing and I
wonder about what I wonder
when my mind wanders
as I listen
to the poets
wander in their poems
hoping that we would wonder
or wander
as they read their lines.
I buy another beer
and I listen
and try to listen
and my mind wanders
as they read
and I wonder why the audience
of poets claps
when they finish their poems.
Is it because they knew
they will be on soon?
I drink my beer
and I wander outside
for a smoke in the beer garden
with my poet of beer
(oh, I mean my pot of beer)
as the autumn wind closes in
and my smoke blows out.
I keep my poems
inside my backpack and
I escape through the side door
and begin to walk back home
thinking about words
as the stars move above
and the fruit bat cries out
as it circles around its tree
as I come home.
Author notes
Some poetry readings are good, some aren't. Sometimes it's just me who feels uneasy at them...
Ever been to a reading?
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I like the part about the fruit bat to, and the part about the autumn wind. It makes your poem Australian lol. The repetition of wonder and wander was effective, not to sure about all the ands though. This poem made me feel like I was there - I've never been to a poetry reading before it would be good to go to one one day.
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wonder, wander, butter. oye...I like it. A confession worth giving for a poetry reading, and comical to me
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this is a good write, for some reason I like this one alot, I like the way it reads I like that I felt the urge to leave the poetry reading as you did and I liked the small bits of imagery nice write.
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Thanks! The fruit bat part is the only bit of the poem i really like.
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i like the touch of the fruit bat, and the feeling of being there at the reading but not being there....you have written what i've felt many times. this is good,
Prof. it sounds like you. love, lane
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i like the narrative and nostalgia effect plus the light flavor of humor - intentional or not is good. I like the third stanza the most with this part 'I keep my poems inside my backpack'.
on the other hand, excessive usage of the word 'and' and 'the' bothers me a bit. the contemporary sound of this piece is crisp. Also, line breaks can be made stronger.
I am student of poetry and this is my opinion regarding your piece. IM me if there is anything I can do to help. My thoughts, your decision.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY a.k.a VIRGOAN
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