Miss hissing like snake
children shrank
their dress became bigger
looked for release
laughter and play come easy
what miss wants
difficult to comply
uneasy in the class
eagar to hear bell
she did not mind
only out performance
of kids in class
pinches them to study
without letting them play or sing
smart feign unwell
find way from drudgery
dull become studious
fare well in the class
Author notes
Angry miss scare the children, who want to play and revel
A contest entry
- Women of the West/ Frontier/Highlands/ Wilderness/Outback #72 by Lyndon.
2600 points, ended May 6, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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"laughter and play come easy
what miss wants
difficult to comply
uneasy in the class
eagar to hear bell"
Sounds like one of my teachers that I had last year. She was a pain in the bum
I must admit this was a little scattered and a re-read too add in a few words here in there might help; but all round this was a pretty awesome piece of work
Good luck with your entry ^^
Claire x
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it was a bit scrambled for my taste but i liked where you took the piece. my mind just wanted a bit more clarity but some things are best left to be pondered on..... good write
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Ahhh. This is a lovely poem but does not adhere to the contest specs with rhyme and meter.
However, a good poem none-the-less.
Thank you for your entry. ~Pamela
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A fun write...My daughter is a little young to understand this though.you have a nice knack of writing of varied subjects..All the best in the contest!
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