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The Poison Rose

The symbol of your love, deepest red.

Forever etched in the rhythm of my heart.

A pulsating stigmata, a constant reminder,

burning my senses now that we are apart.

 

'It is better to have loved and lost', they say.

Do they know how you pentrated my core?

Making me a some one not just a nothing,

only to be left bleeding from every pore.

 

The rose now a symbol of sheer poison,

deepest red turning to shades of blue.

Like me no longer perfect or whole,

but acidicly twisted by the loss of you.

 

Senses are shrivelling in unchartered directions,

acrid emotions claiming possession of my soul.

Lost in confusion, drowning in love's memories,

don't offer sympathy, I am impossible to console.

 

The entitiy of black darkness is the rose,

surrounding my being, bitterness pierces me.

The rose is love turned to ravaging hatred,

the poison within thorns set my demon free.

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Option 2: Title: The Poison Rose

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For My Crowe,

Thanks for the wonderful picture darling,

can't wait to see it as a tatt on me.

All my love, always my eternity

Jem xxxxxxx

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  • NooNiThEWitcH
    April 8, 2008

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    Very nice and dark. I really liked it. I like how you made the usual red rose, the symbol of love 'the poison rose'
    Very nicely written! Well done.

    If you can enter my contest again, it would be great, just IM me the titles of your poems if you enter again.
    Keep on writing,

    Nooni

    (I know this is silly but acids are red and alkalines are blue or at least that is what they turn litmus paper into.. just ignore that lol.. i guess I miss chemistry )


    • Corvus Corone
      April 9, 2008
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      Thank you, Nooni, and glad you enjoyed the piece. Your prompts are fantastic and yes if I get time, work permitting, there are a few I'd like to try write.

      Side note:

      Call it artistic license the chemistry is right, which is probably why I failed sciences at school. As a painter you can get a blue from red with mixing,pretty horrendous blue on its own but great for creating shadows. Hence I am artist not a chemist... oh dear too much logic so early in the day. I need my coffee.

      Jem


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 7, 2008
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    Dark indeed, well written, but very very dark!