My dearest love ~
I desire you to live with me
in this house
with the blue door,
the threads of life incubating
beneath our fingers
İcrisstiena
My dearest love ~
İcrisstiena
Author notes
My one adjective is simply "blue"...
A contest entry
- dear......., by Nicolette.
1100 points, ended April 14, 2008, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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WOW
This left me with a lump in my throat. Perhaps because at one time or another (universally) there is someone to which our hearts have spoken these very words silently.
And you now have said them out-loud and released a million wishes.
This is lyrical beauty at it's finest.
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Simply great
So well written and so meaningful.
Very nice work
Terry
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this is so gorgeous....I picture the blue door opening & I see a whole world; a life together beyond it...a lovely poem, best of luck in the contest.
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I can only echo my co-judge's assessment of and sentiments about this poem, criss.
Very beautiful; such a gentle longing about this little note. It's soft and romantic, yet so very real and the picture compliments it perfectly.
Wonderful simplicity, yet such depth of emotion expressed here in so few words. The closing lines wrap this note up so very well.. I really liked this one. So great to see you writing again!
~ Nicolette
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i love this piece, as i am currently living these exact sentiments.
i agree...simple and elegant
thanks for entering
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My guess is that if this feeling truly belongs to you, many in the world envy it.
A simple but elegant poem, the last couple lines carry the most power.
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Criss,
This takes my breath away. The simplicity in the feeling, contempt, want, DESIRE. So elegantly put! To feel a love like this... would be amazing! =)
xoxo The OTHER Criss
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Soooo lovely to hear from you my friend.
Your comment blew me away...
~ criss
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Very nice.
You chose a very effective adjective, too.
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