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Dance With Me.

Dance with me under the full moon.
Let our bodies intermingle,
like the eagles mate falling from the sky
almost crashing onto the ground.
All is good, all is fine.
I know in your grips so strong,
there are no worries, my world is at ease.
The stereo emits seductive beats.
I grab at you to pull you in,
this fires the flames of passion coming out of me.
How I hope what I'm feeling spreads onto you.
As the fire sparks so does my back ark.
Moans to sexual peaks.
My lipstick smeared, has stained your lips.
Your chest heaves with heavy breath,
as I kiss your neck.
Everything is spinning.
Inhaling the smell of your skin.
Our bodies glisten to each others touch.
Words slip from my mouth, they burn and echo,
as I whisper ever so softly into your ears,
"Fuck me, take me at your will.
Anything that pleases you, pleases me."
Beads of sweat collect and drip.
Their salty taste medicinal, it spurs me on.
Heavy breathing mixed with rhythmic grinding,
we climax to the weeping souls of lovers gone by.
In the after glow I lay by your side,
panting and shaking, you hold me.
All is good, all is fine.

Audrey Evans
5/13/2006

Author notes

Rainbow and Shite. Erotica Also this is about a night I very well remember.

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Comments

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  • Desire gold member
    February 1
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    Oh My~

    Thank You for sharing Your Gems of Exploration~
    but I noticed this Gem was not entered in any of my previous contests except for a different Pre-write contest but it did not meet the requirements then technically would not be considered a qualified entry~however in the future if You enter any of my other contests that are not Pre-write based- then I would say requirement met Sorry
    but it is a Beautiful-Sensual piece!!

    I'm Blessed to read this~
    Honored to have You enter however am unable to award because it did not meet the guidelines- but again a fine piece~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the other contests You entered!
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • DogTagz-TheJalapeno
    June 30, 2008
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    OMG! How hot.
    I love this poem it shows artistic talent keep working at it and try bigger words but all in all great job! And good luck on the contest. I really did love this poem. It had good imagery!


  • etoile
    June 28, 2008
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    thanks for the entry.
    this piece was filled with imagery which makes it all the more interesting to read. at some points the flow seemed kindof awkward but otherwise it was well written. i especially loved how you said "all is good, all is fine" both in the beginning and the end, very strong.

    goodluck in the contest


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    i love this hon this was loaded with full of energy i think you did a very great job i was impressed thanks for entering


  • nobodys-girl
    June 3, 2008

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    oh wow...i loved this. it's just so amazing. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • newnoakua
    May 27, 2008

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    hmm... not quite sured what I think of this piece... also I have no idea which option you took this for. Put the option in your notes please...

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Ithica silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Very passionate write... hehe!!! Possibly better suited to somewhere over the rainbow than off in the wild blue yonder... BUT definately a HOT PIECE... Thank-you for entering!!!


  • Re-invention silver member
    May 22, 2008
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    wow... steamy... great write! good luck!

  • Desire gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    Oh My!!

    Wonderful piece You have versed but unfortunately this contest calls for pre-writes from my previous contests entered but I Thank You for taking the time
    to share Your Voice
    Best wishes in all You doand much love~ Desire~*~


  • LadyUnique silver member
    May 8, 2008
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    thank you for entering and good luck


  • Rhapsody
    May 8, 2008
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    this is good, but, well it's good


    • AudreyEvans
      May 8, 2008
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      Re:Dance With Me.

      Thanks for your comment, but... Nevermind. Thanks for you comment.
      Audrey Evans


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    April 26, 2008

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    Very passionate write. Thank you so much for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Super-GOREgous
    April 8, 2008
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    Dam

    that shit is all HXC like for real! and i love this part--> as I whisper ever so softly into your ears,
    "Fuck me, take me at your will. Anything, that pleases you baby, pleases me."........the reason why is cause im not exactly too sexual but i jus always wanna please so that exactly what i would say ya know... Good Job! -Gore


  • Keystone Theater
    April 7, 2008

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    It is a very graphic, desirous piece, filled with those needs, urges and passions that we feel with that special someone. I like the repeating phrase, "ll is good, all is fine." It somehow finishes the poem with a peace.

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