Why is it I walk through puddles during the rain?
What have I been thinking?
How can I not see
a full glass of wine being offered to me?
Living in my own undoing.
Grasping to get some air.
Hand over fist
I gave away myself,
not saving any of me.
Why do I walk through puddles during the rain?
There is so much as I look behind me,
while seeing what little lies ahead.
Over and over the scenario
of us trundle in my head.
Feeling not myself or like anybody else.
Why do I keep on walking through puddles during the rain?
Nobody knows how I suffer
the pain of numbness I cut away.
Days sanction into weakness
becoming larger in number
I won't admit to.
Hiding behind the overhang,
I've turned onto me.
Ludicrous;
Laughing to substitute needed Valium.
Why am I walking through puddles during the rain?
Audrey Evans
4/7/2008
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Comments
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Yes this is what the life is..one can't bear with it sometimes..well done..I love the depth...and my thanks for sharing it with me...
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love it alot. Very well written. thanks for entering my contest. i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
Thank you for entering my contesst. I really rnjoyed the repitition of the line " Why am I walking through puddles during the rain?". It added nicely to the theme of the poem. great write and good luck
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Thank you for your support and comments on my poem, "Why Do I?".
Looking forward to your next contest.
Audrey Palmer
aka rubyvaroom
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ohh hun,, many ppl feel like that...
don't beso hard on yourself hun... this is quite a piece.. great job!
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Thanks for your comment... But I wasn't being hard on myself, I was pretty much expressing my, Duh Audrey, what's up with this, type of poem.
Why do I? That is my question.
Audrey Evans
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Wow, very nice. I loved the feel you got from the poem. It was very nice but if you would please put the option number you chose in your notes. It was a rule!
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Nice work, very interesting introspective piece. You brought across the emotional turmoil of self analysis with artistry. The piece left plenty of room for the reader's personal perspective and interpretation. Thought provoking and great use of vocbulary to state your thoughts. Thanks for the great read!
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what choice is it. it's good so i don't want to dq but it'll be clearer if you tell me what choice you used
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Re: Why Do I?.
Hello, please tell me what you mean by, choice I used? I'm not clear on what I am suppose to do as far as being in your contest. Thank you for you time and THANK YOU for your support.
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well i gave 5 choices..i think it was 5...on the contest page and u were supposed to pick one of them and write a poem about it or pick a prewritten poem that you think suits one of the choices..so yeah just go and pick the closest one to it. good luck!
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Some stange comments you've recieved!
Thank you for entering, some good questions asked!
Sophie.
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well im confused.. i really enjoyed it, but im curiouse as to what these other nonsense comments are about?
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its really good
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Thanks for the entry
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I read through the comments of the others who have disgraced your page. Sweetheart you have a beautiful mind and a passionate voice. You have a heart that is determined to reveal the intricacies of life as it has lived and you seek to tell them by melody, cadence and rhythm...aka...poetry. I love this poem as I loved "With Me". I enjoy you as a writer and I could careless how you promote your writing, just as long it is seen and read and now I must say that I will add you as a favorite so that I know when something new comes out of your heart. OUTSTANDING JOB>
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FAILFAILFAILFAILFAILFAIL!!!!11111!!!ONE!!!!11
YOU ARE A FAGGOT AND YOU SHOULD DIE A HORRIBLE DEATH. PREFERABLY THROUGH THE MAGIC OF RAPE11!!!!!!1ONE11!! -
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Succes De Scandale.
This is what I am, a monster.
I crave you in front of me swooning,
because of the bleeding from the gash atop of your head. Trickling down the front of your face,
drops of sweat mixed with your blood
fall and splater onto your naked chest
where it finally rests.
All this time there's a smile at an anguished face.
There is no mercy,
this is the last breath you take.
Sharp is the blade your cut with.
Entrails that are yours now before you,
as a smile meets an anguished face.
Audrey Evans
4/25/2008
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also.. i mean it does say SHAMELESS ... Way to go again. You rock.
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I thatnk you.
I did not know that I caused such a stir within in the "Shameless" box. Well whatever, if a person can't see the stupidy in the "Shameless" box in the first place, then thoes people are a lost cause. B.t.w. thank you for your words of support. No, You Rock!
Audrey Evans
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dont let those other losers get you down. I clicked because of the humor in the shameless box. At least someone has a little wit. So dont feel bad because those people are hating on you. Anyways.. I loved this poem and i agree with the suicide note comment that was a good example.
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Eh, I was hesitant to read, for your desperation for comments suggests idiocy. None the less, I gave you a chance. The verdict: Don't depend on childish tricks for comments, use your own art and ability to network to become known on this site. Sure, you have a lot of views now, but such desperation will only lead to you losing your ability to use this site, y'know?
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Responce.
Ok. Look if you or anyone reads my work and a feeling of drepression, love, joy, introspection and so on, then I'm on the right track. So thank you for such wonderful comment. Still whatever hollow groung you feel I pissed on, get over it. "Shameless" look up the meaning of that word in the dictionary. I suggest the Oxford, Websters is for hacks.
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I'm not going to argue (in my favor) of the definition of the word shameless, because, honestly, you're absolutely accurate. I will, on the other hand, argue that it's context is 'shameless promotion', in which the meaning of the 'statement' would suggest dissemination of information about a product, product line, brand, or company without shame in method, your product being your poem. Not false advertisement. Of course, perhaps you interpreted shameless as dishonest.
Again, I like the poem. I just didn't like the package in which it came to me.
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I refuse to read it. why bother adding something like that in the description box of shameless? your reducing the quality and decency of this site, all for the sake of a few comments. You need a life...
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Judgement.
Ok, I was going to come out with guns blazing to the expressed view of me not having a life. Well guess what I think you need a hug. So come over here sweetie, let ma ma give you some sugar.
Audrey Evans
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