Stuck somewhere between smiling and crying
Living and dying
All the time hiding in shadows and screaming I'm here
But you don't see me
Caught in a moment of pleasure and pain
Playing the game
All the time hoping that you want this too
A war in my head and joy in my heart
So close but so far
All I see is you in everything
You don't see me
Please tell me what you think
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HOODWINKED !!!
Unrequited love is a burden to bear, feeling invisible is heartbreaking. This poem shares the pain and churns the emotions. Well written!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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Hoodwinked
The poem does have a catchy rhyme. It is not uncommon to feel unnoticed. We all want to be paid attention to by others. Best of luck to you in your future writes. -
Hoodwinked!
The internal rhyme you use in your poems is really very well done. It creates an even flow and the piece rolls off the tongue.
Shari-Lei
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Ah, the dualities of living, of playing the world's game while listening to the soul's heart. Keep looking, talking, screaming -- maybe you will be heard and seen.
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And that is sad and unfortunate. Hopefully some how you can be seen and appreciated by the one you want to see you. It sounds like a difficult bridge you walk. I hope you cross safely.
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