It was such a lovely day for our trip,
the sun was shining and we let her rip.
Children huddled in quenchless expectancy;
When, where, and how - were the main three.
Who would have guessed the mountain would collapse,
leaving us all in a medley of maxed out total lapse.
The eerie feel of the quiet view; was all too much,
we huddled, cried, and calming ourselves with touch.
Looking around help was nowhere to be found,
there being absolutely nobody within miles around.
One would think it to be the end for us, and it was,
But, apparently God has us in mind and He gave us love.
For out of nowhere there appeared this stocky man.
He seemed so knowledgeable and he lent us a hand.
First relieving us of our tangled jail of a car,
then in an instant he was out of sight, by far.
We couldn't see hide or hair of him, where'd he go,
this puzzled our children, we couldn't say; we didn't know.
Time alone will maybe one day fully reveal,
who this man was, and whether or not he was real.
A contest entry
- Earth Angels/Quickie/10/30 by imahealer.
525 points, ended April 7, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such a thankful poem. Some heros seem to vanish into thin air. I felt the meter was excellent. Nice title. Rhyme scheme felt real. I'm certain the scene you have written has happened many times before. These people are unsung heros and our earth angels. LOvely take on the prompt. Thank you so much for entering my contest!
Shana -
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Thank you Shana for this lovely review and for catching my mistake
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a good piece of poetry you have penned - aye, there are someo in this life who rush to help and once they have they leave without wanting any praise for their actions, saintly souls
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Ah, we can use even more 'saintly souls'
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