Dear Lord God,
I don't know
what
I could have done,
but if I listen, will you tell me?
Dear Lord Jesus
I fell in pieces
and all of my men
could do nothing.
Would you, please;
I know you can! I can!
My Lord, my God,
I know your word.
But I have been oh,
such a turd.
Let me break down
& fertilize.
I decompose
& realize.
When life begins once more anew
let me just be a little roo.
a little rue
will sometimes do,
but sooner or later,
you alligator,
you got to get up
from that muddy crawl
and proudly walk
down through the hall.
Amen.
Author notes
This could be a prayer for angels to pray.
A contest entry
- Earth Angels/Quickie/10/30 by imahealer.
525 points, ended April 7, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Maybe the best way to say thanks is to be real, to do good for the one whom you wish to thank
Comments
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A welcome for my heart friend.
I loved the play on words, and especially the ending.
All things will be, but all things in reality must continue to evolve.
Peace to you friend.
God bless.
~ James ~
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Excellent
Ah, 'tis a fine write, just as it is. I liked the format, and content. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Beautifully done, poet... I really like how you captured your words... It was really powerful. I like your use of language... it was beautifully done
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lol, if you're still looking for a title, i think you already said it yourself in your author notes, "a prayer for angels to pray" this was a very nice piece, it made me smile,=)
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AWW
IM NOT TOO SURE WHETHER TO TAKE OYU SERIOUS OR NOT CAUSE ITS KINDA LIKEA JOKE IN THE MIDDLE BUT IT STARTS OFF REALLY WELL... AND FOR A "GOD" IT SEEMS LIKE YOUR TALKING TO MOTHER NATURE... BUT TYPICALLY I DO LIKE THIS CAUSE IT MAKES ME LAUGH BUT ANOTHER PERSON WOULD BE ALL BUTT HURT ABOUT IT...LOL ESPECIALLY THEM WEIRDO GOD LOVING FREAKS....
-GORE
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Nice one! Serious and vivid, with a muddy aligator thrown in- fits like perfection. The piece has a flow, a crawl sort of with the short lines, the gets up and stands on its own at the end! Very nice!
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Actually as I was reading this, I felt you were writing about an earth angel who wasn't doing his/her job. Spirituality plays a huge part in this verse. This was the perfect out-of-the box write. Thank you so much for entering my contest. Best wishes.
Shana -
I like this because at first it has a very serious feel to it, then it gets to be a little comical. This was a good read. As far as a title goes.. Your author notes kind of gave me an idea. Angels Prayer?
Good luck also on your search for a title, I often have had problems myself in titling a piece.
Well good luck with this again, and I say that its a good write, to me anyways.
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