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Maya Unveiled (English Sonnet)

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This morning, Life has lifted Maya’s veil
revealed to me essential maskless face
invited me, on waves of bliss to sail
and gift of revelation to embrace

I welcomed dawn’s rebirth with gentle gaze
and blackbird’s sweet farewell to tender night
felt ebb and flow of breath face into haze
saw time and space parading into Light

But, best of all, the world that I once knew
appeared no more outside this mortal shell
From where I dwelled, I had a different view
No longer was I bound by Maya’s spell

The world now moves within me, through my core
I am the ocean – yet, I have no shore


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Maya … Illusion, mistaking the transient for the real, appearance disguised as reality

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  • Hello Maa. This has some great lines in it; your last line certainly one of them. Also there seems to be a tip of the hat to a hymn, the part about blackbirds farewell. A very nice write, congratulations on your Gold Trophy. My regards.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    April 28

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    "...I am the ocean – yet, I have no shore"--
    The endless concept is alluring,
    reminding me of other words
    we both appear to have just read,
    Richard's water to water conclusion.

    Your gift you share with your words!

    Aesthete

  • YAY!!

    Wonderful sonnet. Congratulations on a well deserved gold in this round. Truly an excellent work. YAY!!! ~Pamela

  • WOW!!!

    I love this piece - in all its magnificent glory!!! Congratulations on winning the golden chalice with your beautiful poem, Maa!!! Keep on keeping on... Peace, Cyn


  • Gwenevere
    April 26
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    Congratulations on Gold, a beautiful write.Good luck in the next round,Ros

    • maa gold member
      April 26
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      thank you for your kind heart ...

  • NeonRose silver member
    April 25
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    Absolutely beautiful, and well-deserving of the Gold. Congratulations on your win.

    • maa gold member
      April 26
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      thank you so much, that's very generous of you ...

  • RuthKephart
    April 25
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    Just back for another look before final judging
    Ruth

  • RuthKephart
    April 24

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    I was a bit worried yesterday when this poem didn't show up in my list for this contest as I thought you may have withdrawn it. Glad to see it listed here again today
    Ruth
  • Keith Drew gold member
    April 14

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    Very nice I was sailing on that sea with no shore.
    I heard the blackbird for a moment calling in the breeze.
    Wonderful Marion, a really calming piece from your heart even though you cleverly stuck to the mechanics of what they need.
    Its a winner in my book, even if no prize becomes attached.
    I love the way that you think.
    Keith.


  • raspberry Greeters member
    April 9

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    you leave me amazed at the wealth of knowledge u own!! This is soo well put into poetic tunes.. thanks for feasting your readers thus.. by the way, the last line stands apart.. Classy!!!!! "I am the ocean – yet, I have no shore".. powerful!


  • Wandika gold member
    April 8
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    Well done sonnet

    An excellent sonnet with an interesting feel.

    Jim


  • Amera gold member
    April 7

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    Nothing can be more beautiful than spirituality expressed in a sonnet and you have done it perfectly here.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • myrataal silver member
    April 7

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    Ah, Precious One ...

    ever transcending, ever expanding, the soul tests its boundaries to find at last its own: the ancient oceanic sounds of vast motion ... not held by earth or the restrictiveness of coasts ... but free within an inner vastness of belong.

    Powerful, yet tender, the wondrous words of meaningful release.



    Blessed be.
    Myra


  • RuthKephart
    April 7
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    What a truly beautiful sonnet this is and such perfect meter and rhyme. This is just one of those poems you read and know that it should be read by your childrens children and their children after them Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest
    Ruth


  • NeonRose silver member
    April 7
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    Beautiful sonnet! The end couplet is amazing. Good luck in the contest.


  • wishintreeUK
    April 7

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    This is a beautiful, deep sonnet, very expressive, great ending couplet, well done, I thoroughly did enjoy reading this.

    Katie


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 7

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    Excellent sonnet - subtle volta in line 9, resolution in the couplet, good iambic meter - expressing philosophy and experience perfectly.

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