Scuffling dirt,
Inside a smelly shoe.
Lint in a sweaty pocket,
Crudely thrown away.
Squeezing like a vice,
On an aching bruise.
Stepping on the thorn,
Submerged in the foot.
Pressing on the mouth,
With the bloody lip.
Tying tight the hands,
Behind the battered back.
What kind of hell,
Is humanity conceiving?
What kind of demons,
Are they letting loose?
Can I shoot them with a gun?
One bullet to end it all?
Can I cock the pistol?
Trigger a swarm of shots?
Is there anything I can do?
To make injustice barren?
A word whispers in my anger,
I hear it like an explosion.
Pray.
Author notes
So many people being hurt by others. We see it on the news, we hear it on the radio, we read it in the newspapers. We live it in school, witness it at home, suffer through it in the community, and watch our families abused by others around us. So much hate, so little respect, overflowing, uncontrollable, so terribly sad. I wish it all would end, so that I could see my family happy and not tortured by the awful words of others, being used, taken for granted and put through hell. It makes me angry, but through my anger, I feel a gentle assurance that God is just, and He prevails, and will stand by our sides no matter what. So I find peace in prayer.
This is my favorite poem right now, it was something that i started writing, and before I knew it it was all finished, and every sentence described how I felt about the situation. Its just something that I feel about what is going on in the world today, so much judging and contempt. I really want to be able to do something to change all this, but I am only human, and that is when I am gently reminded to pray, and I know that God is the one who can change all this.
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Comments
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I think this is a very meaningful poem. It builds into pain and confusion but then the simple word "pray" at the end promises peace. Very nice job. Thanks for entering.
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A word whispers in my anger,
I hear it like an explosion.
Pray.
prayers and understanding..
plus taking a stand.. not so much with more
violence
but with letting those that can help know. -
i can feel you here.
nicely done
keep sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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this was delightful! the ending was very good. the simple "pray" does so much. thank you for entering it!
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Great job - like it alo
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Wow this is a great write. Great job on the wording. It's awesome.
Thanks for entering.^^
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there is much pain in this world, that is true. i try to find one thing a day to smile about and almost always can. then there are those days when i can find nothing...
good write, thank you for entering and good luck
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this is really strong and blunt, a kind of in your face type of vibe in this poem. I really appriciate the honest in this poem.
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this is really in-your-face and has a good message
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9pts...
Thank you for this fine contribution to The Poetic Bandits Reading List
~Lilac
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We all need to stand up and take a hard look at the person next to us.
And ask our self eves if we know this person at all. At our jobs at school, Some times we see people every day of our life's but really have not taken the time to get to know that person next to you. Till things happen and its to late and that person next to you kills someone of every one. We need to get more involved and look deeper in to the life's of other. I really enjoyed our words and that content of it all, And your notes are so true, Thank you for sharing, LISA
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Thoughtful
I appreciate this poem much beacuse this is a fine piece of creative exultation... It also aptly delves into the ills that have come to cripple the social fabric of humanity. Great job pal... Thanks for sharing.
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I like this poem, the first part left a bitter taste in my mouth - it was very well written... and the ending left me with a fragment of hope the only thing that I think you might like to have a look at is that 'imerged' isn't a word, I think maybe 'submerged' might be a better fit? Just my opinion though Good luck in the contests
Keep writing
Polly
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So very true, why can't we just work through the problems instead of hating? Idealistic I know but don't knock it until you tried more peaceful means.
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Not bad ...
but it doesn't answer the question posed by this contest. Good luck in the others.
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This is thought provoking! I myself have often wondered about the neverending violence that keeps happening and have wished often enough to let it all end. You have done a great job with this Good to read something so good
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well done, I particulary like that all the answers that would equal violence are shown as petty and imoral when the best answer is spoken and set apart.
May the stars light your path.
DarkWind
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Injury inflicted on flesh already injured . . . the sheer callousness of those who would do that is staggering. You've well communicated the pain in this piece.
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As we become translucent to sorrow, to anger, to suffering, we can stand and acknowledge it has happened, but do not have to be drawn in....these are the thoughts that came as I read this poem. I have turned off my tv and lsiten to music or write or create art..it is much more peaceful there.
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The author notes are more entertaining than the poem and believe me that is a good thing
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Certainly agree with you in your sentiments expressed here - God can make this so much easier to take, if you give it up to Him to look after. Prayer certainly can ease the troubled spirit and calm one so they can accept things and realize they cant make a change - they have no control over the actions of others. Certainly easy to read and understand.
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Really good poem ... Has alot of mean and a good write .... Good luck in the contes
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