Her tongue
serpentines
in silky salivation
over desire's
naked pores.
Mouth engulfing
need's organ,
exquisitely constricting
till volcano erupts.
Hanging up
phone,
services rendered
for slithering seduction
from wheel chair.
Author notes
30 words
Snake Bite
A contest entry
- Semi Quick Contest by Reptile Lady ADULT ONLY PLEASE by Reptile Lady.
550 points, ended April 8, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - INVITE ONLY :- FOR MY SNAKE BITE CONTEST by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
300 points, ended April 11, 2008, 4 entries
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Comments
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Awesome write
You have penned brilliance within your words..
Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest
Julie -
This was really an "AHA" moment. Nice use of alliterization! I am a massagae therapist and some men are always asking me to listen over the phone as they "whack" off! UGH! Maybe I should charge and make some extra cash! Best wishes in this contest! The best I've read til now!
Shana -
LOL!!! I love where you have taken this prompt. The imagery is very vivid. Good luck in the contest.
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LOL, yes, a caller cannot know who might be on the other end of a sex line, we also don't know the needs of the caller. But maybe that isn't the point, for as you mentioned, it was a service rendered.
An original approach, I liked it.
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An effective piece, quirky, kinda dirty in an eloquent way, with that twist at the end. I hope it does well in the contest. Nice touch - the mouth seeking the organ, and that organ being the ear.
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WOWzers! That is certainly a very poignant piece of thought! Intriguing to say the least, such a vivid description with a great twist! Nicely penned!!!
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Holy Mother of Pearl Jam!!
Gosh~~
Trips over feet
Oh My and You brought heat in 30words~
Yep You sure did
Magnificent take on the picture~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweetness
Best wishes too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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