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behind closed doors.

 

 

 

 

come.
come to reality.

see me follow tails
end trail past the
shameless fool
a purpose?
no.
there never was.

ponder the complexity
complicate me.
not an enigma
just a spontaneous mess
of outside stimuli

can hardly catch myself.
asking why, lost in retrospect
wishing for your laughter
a sort of bland hypocrisy

fall on the mattress
watch the branches swing
if you saw me then..
you know
there really is
nothing to me

gazing gazing
the eyes follow what thoughts fear
thoughts that appear
as hopelessly pathetic.

ruled by subjective manner.
dead in guilt of
my all too common weakness.

 

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put the option as my title.

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  • I really like this, especially these lines. It is so interesting and you write beautifully!

    ponder the complexity
    complicate me.
    not an enigma
    just a spontaneous mess
    of outside stimuli


    However, I don't understand this part.


    see me follow tails
    end trail past the
    shameless fool
    a purpose?

    It just doesn't seem to be grammatical. Perhaps it is and I just don't get it, in which case ignore this comment.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    April 23, 2008
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    well penned piece. each stanza flowed into the other one nicely.


  • Metaphorist
    April 14, 2008

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    Right off the bat, the itsy-bitsy font threw me off. But once I got to reading, I was impressed. Ambigious poem, but the picture gives the meaning away a bit. The third stanza and the last were just perfect. Well done indeed. Thanks for entering.