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So soft, smooth to the touch,
plumpness sweet, scent adored;
nothing like new born
to bring out adoration in people.
bald heads or spiked hair
burps, expressions of concentration
babies fun to hold
bring smiles to all who visit.
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Smooth, unlined face
breasts pert and pretty;
long legs, tight bum
teen dreamed of her first lover.
Too young, taken, raped
not what she wanted;
no one asked, they took
virginal no longer.
Lies in fetal position
on hospital bed;
black and blue bruises
not the ones that count.
Outward blemishes heal
inner ones last a lifetime;
never again filled with dreams
but deep in despair.
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Face filled with creases
yet smile softens face;
grandmother's white hair
shows her age, but will is strong.
Hands covered with age spots
held babies tenderly,
loved husband dearly,
now bent, swollen with arthritis.
It's not what's outside that counts;
that beauty fades
yet inner radiance remains
until death does final call.
Author notes
prompt: Skin
A contest entry
- Skin by Heart Sutra.
1000 points, ended May 6, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is a very powerful write. i like how it took you through stages and stayed true to its voice. thanks for entering.
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Great take on this prompt..and I love this:
It's not what's outside that counts;
that beauty fades
yet inner radiance remains
until death does final call.
Good luck in the contest.
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You've put this together in a great way. I dearly love it becaus it's so true. I imagine everyone can relate to it in some way and that's what poetry is in my book. Shancy.
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It's true, yes. Isn't it amazing how even though our bodies age our inner spirit remains young. And I agree, even yet, we can find the goodness which lies in everyone if only we take time to look.
Well done.
~Mary O
PS Thanks for you comment on my poem. Most appreciative
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I like the three stages of the skin as a person grows, I even liked the personal touch in the second stanza. Good luck to you in the contest.
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Excellent pieces - your writing has really evolved.
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