Marvelous blending, an erotic swirl,
A Carmel flavoring, atop vanilla cream.
Kiss of passion as their boundaries
Entwine with a twist of sweet promises.
Maraschino cherries, stems between teeth,
Enticed they are, by the movements of their tongues.
Arousal forms by combination of heat against cold.
Sweet Hershey Kiss size nipples, being grazed by cherry lips,
Undressing easy, as each explores the other.
Neither cares if the two mix, perfectly whipped with licorice.
Dainty fingers, against his solid chocolate form,
Areas well caressed as she leans in on his all day sucker.
Eagerly he dives between luscious thighs, tasting the creamy fluff.
Pleasures of the sweetest, engulf their desires
Leaving them high of adrenaline, to last for hours.
Entertaining in positions, these two dance,
Assisting the other in pleasuring, their bodies melt.
Sweet arousal between chocolate and cream, this combinations perfect.
Erotically pleased, their love doesn’t split over variations of toppings.
Author notes
A contest entry for:
Vanilla and Chocolate - a Sensual Confection
Sensual and erotic pieces about interracial romance using sugared and tasty imagery
Done in an Acrostic:
Make Me A Sundae Please
A contest entry
- Vanilla and Chocolate - a Sensual Confection by dance11.
1000 points, ended April 20, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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YUM !
now that's sweet desire and sundae smooth...yummmmie! Tory you really know how to turn up the heat don't you...
Love you bunches
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Very well done baby, this is a wonderful romp through your imagination which seems to have no boundaries. Love you sweetheart, best of luck...Scott
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I like that you took a different form than most, and went for the acrostic. Nicely done. However, I must admit that the constantly flipping pics at the top were a bit distracting. Thank you for your entry!
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OK so Hershey is a "brand name" - well SO WHAT??? I got the allusion - nipples as big as Hershey bars, nipples engorged till they are the size of a BIG NAME BRAND. Bloody great metaphor! Sheesh, everyone's a critic!
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THIS IS AMAZZZZZINNG!!!!!!!!!!
uninhibited, free, delicious, sensual, enticing.. -
first off I'd like to start off bye saying that I thought you did a good job with the whole sexual innuendo with the sundae metaphor. worked very well for this poem. What I thought could have been better for the imagery of the poem would be in the beginning of the 4th stanza. "Sweet Hershey size nipples", I don't want to sound rude or anything, but what does that mean? Hershey is a brand name. there is no such size relative to that name. The image would be a lot stronger if you were put "Hershey Kiss size nipples", that way it's the same amount of syllables, not interrupting whatever flow you were going for here. Doing it for a contest takes away from the whole giving you credit for the metaphor, but having restrictions always makes things harder, so for that I'll give ya congrats for a job well done. Hope to hear from ya soon, Please don't be shy to read and comment on some of my work at Sharepoetry.com, You'll find everybody there very nice and more willing to help a poet learn and give constructive criticism rather than just giving praise so they can get oints to feature their poems. It's about becoming a better poet overall. Please stop by and take a Look. Somebody to look for also would be "Lad", he's a very talented poet and an amazing man. Hope to see you over there and hear from ya soon.
TTYL
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Thanks for your comment. Indeed it was suppose of said that I think i cleared it when I was editing. Thanks for catching it. Always a pleasure hearing from you.
PP
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Wonderful!!!
I don't know whether to run over and plant a wet on my hubby's lips or go get some ice cream!
That is my dilemma. LOL!
Great!
Good luck in the contest!
Peace,
Lorena
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Thank so much for your delicious comment.
Run and get some ice cream them give him that eye 
and well ...the rest is in your court. Thanks s much for reading me.
Passionspromise
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Ice Cream and Sex...
Two of my favorite things rolled into one poem
Keep up the good work
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sweetly erotic! YUM!!
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A SWEET & SENSUAL TREAT, INDEED - WITH A CHERRY ON TOP!
GOOD LUCK in the contest with this delicious piece, Miss Passions - which I hope to sink my teeth into and lick clean in my erotic dreams as I am of to bed now - to dream sweet and sticky dreams of you! Perhaps, I'll dream of a banana split as I've devoured this sundae very quickly! HE! HE! Permission to make a Sunday of me own and to lick it all up - if I can find the key to me cock cage?
Love & Peace!
Earl.
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Dream away just dont forget to tell me all about it and how great I was
Love ya hon
Passions
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Very creative way to express your feelings about sundaes, quite the slide show given to go with this write as well. Certainly a fitting entry into this contest. Wish you well...
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all i can say is this makes one crave a sundae ...lol
well done to you, a deliscious write. good luck in the contest.
**Master Ktulu**
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*bows* Thanks Master for your lovely words, glad you enjoyed it I hope you get that sundae
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You dirty girl, you!
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Wow! *fans herself down*
This is just hot, sexy and sensual!
Too yummy for words
Best of luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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LMAO you know you lubs me
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Thanks Manda love you girl...hope all is well and thank you for reading me.
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This is awesome!
Lovely imagery and metaphors throughout
this piece. I could sure use a sundae
like that myself! lol Wonderful work
as always and all the best to you with
this one in the contest! Thanks a lot
for sharing it with me!
Jeremy0826
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Thanks Jer for reading and shall i say proofreading it for me..I was nervous about the content...I am not use to "sugar coating" it lol. Appreciate your voice.
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