temptation writhes, enticing me
your skin so cold against my heat
chilling yet igniting fires
inviting thoughts of delicious danger
wrap tighter, infiltrate my senses
isn't this the sweetest game?
Author notes
Snake Bite
30 words
A contest entry
- Semi Quick Contest by Reptile Lady ADULT ONLY PLEASE by Reptile Lady.
550 points, ended April 8, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh my! *gulp* Uhhhh, yah, this is quite good dear. Congrats on the HM.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Love the form written, the piece is deep meaningful to the readers mind.
Sensual seduction and boy those games are fun
Thank you for your entry and good luck
Julie -
Nice alliteration in this short but inviting verse. Very erotic. Using the metaphoric "game" was creative. cold against warm, nice comparison alluding to "the serpent" Title was perfect for your verse! Best wishes in this contest.
Shana -
This is fantastic... the way it slithers up on you... Wow!
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This was deliciously-dark and erotic. Fantastic writing here. Great imagery too. Keep it up.
Love
Wayne Leon
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Loved it Mum
Your brilliant writing to me, as always
Love the shorter stanzas etc stuff....really worked for it
Cin
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inviting thoughts of delicious danger (fav line)
I love the way you wrote this, it made me envision two lovers together. Hmmm. Beautiful.
best of luck!
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ow wow thanks for the share, I love this sort of sensual writing it really works wonders for me...
Thanks...I need this just before I go to bed..lol
Simon
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