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My Love

Missing image

Words spoke
where eyes peered
wondering at beings
we couldn't be.

but I have seen,


a faltered smile
  stealing a breathe
      from a lovers' chest

and her whole

exceeded,

              

         everything.

                  

Author notes

30words
prompt:
'Other men said they have seen angels,
But I have seen thee
And thou art enough.'
~ by G. Moore ~

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  • Solo Wisp gold member
    April 7, 2008

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    Amazing stolen breath from the moment within the quote!

    Strength seems stronger the further one reads.

    Love your take

    eg ~ Steve


  • penman gold member
    April 7, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Terrific take on the prompt. A great choice of 30 words. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 6, 2008
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    Hurry up and write already.