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Guile's Way

Delicately draped deceptions
racing seamlessly within the apple
pulsating
salivating
until the reapers enthralling kiss

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Prompt: Picture
15 Words

A contest entry

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  • joelegy
    April 6, 2008

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    beautiful.
    You are REALLY good at short poems. well.. all poems. but I especially liek teh short ones. maybe thats because my attention span is like ZERO tho...
    hahaha.
    amazing poem!
    nice alliteration in first line


  • Valley Girl silver member
    April 6, 2008

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    I really like how you have written this like the apple's view, versus focusing on Snow white, and the villian. Very creative, and great word choices. Best of luck in the contest, and thank you for entering.