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Vivid Memories

A brilliance I have never witnessed.
White!
Blinding,
as I crack the door open.
The gateway to eternity awaits.
I fathom the unimaginable,
as I step across the threshold.
Into a blankness surreal in nature,
I plunge.
My mind journeys along a trail of temptation,
following my soul.
I traverse across a forbidden path
dotted by black silhouettes
drenched in despair.
Eager for a direction
or an explanation,
I confront a figure.
But, before I could utter even a wisp of a word
a thunderous voice invades my thoughts.

  "The unknown awaits you!"

I wander aimlessly
without direction.
Lost in a sea of nothingness.
I struggle to understand this,
this damn place!
...

I stumble.
...

Then,
a whisper from behind me blew across my ear.
A familiar voice!
My own!
I turn to seek the source.
Nothing.
Save, this confounding emptiness
that confines me.

  'What is this place!'
  ...

  'Where am I!'
  ...

  'Why am I here!!!!!!!!!!!'
  ...

The reality of my dilemma,
overcoming.

Drowsy...

Dizzy...

I fall...
...

My eyes awake
to a familiar surrounding.
I stare in thought at the ceiling,
as the wind from the fans
send chills throughout my wet body.



A contest entry

Please be critical in your commentary on this piece. Your critique will help me to grow strength and wisdom through spiritual expression, as I journey through this existence.

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  • poetsruletheworld
    April 7, 2008

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    Well it's a little difficult to be too critical when I find the piece really wonderful. Nicely written and thanks so much for entering.