A brilliance I have never witnessed.
White!
Blinding,
as I crack the door open.
The gateway to eternity awaits.
I fathom the unimaginable,
as I step across the threshold.
Into a blankness surreal in nature,
I plunge.
My mind journeys along a trail of temptation,
following my soul.
I traverse across a forbidden path
dotted by black silhouettes
drenched in despair.
Eager for a direction
or an explanation,
I confront a figure.
But, before I could utter even a wisp of a word
a thunderous voice invades my thoughts.
"The unknown awaits you!"
I wander aimlessly
without direction.
Lost in a sea of nothingness.
I struggle to understand this,
this damn place!
...
I stumble.
...
Then,
a whisper from behind me blew across my ear.
A familiar voice!
My own!
I turn to seek the source.
Nothing.
Save, this confounding emptiness
that confines me.
'What is this place!'
...
'Where am I!'
...
'Why am I here!!!!!!!!!!!'
...
The reality of my dilemma,
overcoming.
Drowsy...
Dizzy...
I fall...
...
My eyes awake
to a familiar surrounding.
I stare in thought at the ceiling,
as the wind from the fans
send chills throughout my wet body.
A contest entry
- Welcome Back!! by poetsruletheworld.
1800 points, ended April 20, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please be critical in your commentary on this piece. Your critique will help me to grow strength and wisdom through spiritual expression, as I journey through this existence.
Comments
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Well it's a little difficult to be too critical when I find the piece really wonderful. Nicely written and thanks so much for entering.



