Sometimes,
I have to imagine
the phrases you make
and pretend
that they're for me.
I'd sit here wishing
that we'd have a garden situation:
flowers, benches, plants
and alcohol - with the moon on the side.
Playing with repressed rants
and chanting of phrases
that flowed through our teeth
even if we didn't understand.
I'd wonder whether emotion
was suitable for present situations,
while you'd laugh at every passerby,
gifting them your incoherancies
which were somewhat slaughtered
during the day.
I don't know why I try.
The constructed moments I define
are not recollections of any sort...
simply conjured yearning
based on words we wrote
in our last chapter.
You'd want an illusional show
where canaries are pulled out
from coal coloured barrels.
[but I'm no magician]
It's difficult to breathe.
Don't get me wrong, I can.
I just don't want to.
Author notes
There are no words.
A contest entry
- Have you ever... by Age of Rain.
1300 points, ended July 31, 2008, 57 entries
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This is a very nice write, very detailed with great metaphor and imagery...a comfortable flow, rather dreamy...yet a strong sense of illusions we all long to be true...well done.
mystic
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Nice background! *laughs* 'and alcohol' is that how your garden situations occur?
Seriously though, this was really good. You had depth, excellent vocabulary, and great imagery. Really well done!
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hahaha, it was a dream I had
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wow.. you can presence the pain and disgust here and I sorry to hear that... but the poem is astounding veyr well described
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I'd sit here wishing
that we'd have a garden situation:
flowers, benches, plants
and alcohol - with the moon on the side.
You know I love it.
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You make a good point. Even though we can do something doesn't mean we should.
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good
Flows nicely.
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thank you
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so many dreams constructed on the wings of innocent birds, a wish for fragrant gardens, moonlight delights, magic. yes, there are no words to describe a desperate longing. just allusions to illusions i guess ~
i've appreciated this immensly ~
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just allusions to illusions - you're right
Thank you for the comment
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Interesting
I like the mood of this piece. Its as if
you're speaking reflectively to a close
companion inside the privacy of your thoughts.
The hopes and aspirations of two people sadly
are many times very different. Thats why its
so important in life to find someone who is
compatible to you. An intriguing poem with
plenty of feeling and emotion
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Liked the presentation on this page - the starkness of white on balck with that hint of shading grey in the back. Great ending - Don't get me wrong. I can. I just don't want to. Title very catchy, brings one in to read more.
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thank you
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spechless
Im not sure what to say. I felt the raw emotion expressed in this and found myself physically aware of just how powerful love can be.
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You'll also have to notice how fast the same love can fade away - thanks for the comment
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The title of course sucked me in.
I did enjoy.
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