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[ Tidal Bore ]

TIDAL  BORE



tides




Riding waves,
smashing surf,
  raw foaming powerful sea,
  crashing brute force energy.
    Few ripples - deepened ‘swells’,
bore funnelling tides,
  spawn a bore.
  gathering speed,
    a herd stampedes - nothing in its wake.
Trees, carried upstream,
  unleashed torrent, of sparks and steam.
    rushing over rocks and stones,
      withering worn, ‘till no more.

Written by Libithina ©

Author notes

It was interesting to use the fifty word limit on this, as this poem is quite long and I have abridged it, chopping here and paring there.. pleased with the finish. Good discipline and enjoyed taking part.

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  • SweetRoses
    October 5, 2008
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    This is really well written. I really enjoyed reading it. It kept me entranced. Nicely done.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 1, 2008
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    A nice observational piece.


  • Mallig gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    Very strong imagery here, succinctly and artfully put. Enjoyed " gathering speed,
    a herd stampedes - nothing in its wake." Excellent ending too! Congratulations on the trophy and good luck!

  • mcheadle
    May 14, 2008
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    Excellant job

    You did well with your 50 words impressing work...mac

  • Acidanthra
    April 19, 2008

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    Immaculate imagery! I enjoyed the vision of this poem line by line. You did a wonderful job with your revisions, and created a spectacular poem! Thanks for entering!


    • libithina
      April 20, 2008
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      Thankyou so very much for your wonderful inspiring comments and for the honorable win Hugs Lib x x

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    W0W

    Your words have painted a powerful picture in my mind...a raging sea filled with anger...washing over land and man as well...awesome! could feel the splashing of the water on my face as I read Niaish so much for sharing and good luck in the contest


    • libithina
      April 18, 2008
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      Thankyou so very much for your much appreciated comments That is brilliant and so very glad that you enjoyed it
      Big Hugs Lib x x x

  • DDsithstriker
    April 15, 2008

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    This is a piece of raw imagery. There is line and structure, but it does not constrict and confine that natural flow of raw description. I myself have never been able to write like this, but you've done it wonderfully. Props to you, I know you'll end doing well in this competition.

    Justin


    • libithina
      April 15, 2008
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      Thankyou so very much for reading this striker and for leaving such a constructive, inspiring and encouraging comment..I loved what you said...and take note about the observation on the line and structure not constricting...Hugs Lib x x


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 15, 2008

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    Enjoyed reading this and yen out of ten for succeeding in keeping to the right amount of words-such diciplines are a test to us all!
    xxx Hilly


    • libithina
      April 15, 2008
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      Thankyou for reading this..yes, it was difficult to get it down to the fifty word limit, as the original write was much longer..but yes good discipline..I agree..Hugs Lib xx

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