Love hurts and hurts like neverbefore
In love you never know whats in store
It breaks when you think the going is strong
After which you cry even when you watch a comedy like king kong
Lots of sacrifices and compromises in vain
Oh fuck! Its so much so much pain
While gal friends carry an expiry date
You want one-more one-more date
While you might want her to be your wife
she'd wicked-smile and say get out of my life
This is the sad story of life
Think of this and handpick your wife
Author notes
A gone wrong love; were things "perfect" and then things changed? They either stopped loving you or you stopped loving them?
A contest entry
- Falling a thousand and not moving an inch at all by HeartBr8ker.
300 points, ended April 7, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Wow....
This actally made me laugh! I didn't think the idea of love would make me laugh after the last couple of months in my love life haha.
A massive well done.
I adore the way you have written the poem - for once it's a serious but also light sense of humour when it comes to love. And your ideas are so true sometimes.
Basic but brilliant
Well done, good luck and thank you for entering.
Keep on writing such good work.
Rebecca
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Rebecca
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Great rhyme scheme, nice construction and flow. Held my interest well. Interesting use of vocabulary and artistic method. Thanks for the read.
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amazing poem
loved the flow much thanks for enter best to you dear! -
Love finds us all at some time in life, You've got to take it whilst you got it if it does fall apart, maybe that love was not love and love will find away to your heart.
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Wow, congrats on the silver and on the tone of this write
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Beautiful
Sad cause it is true
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