Who is this person you call a friend,
On this person can you depend?
Will they help you through life's strife,
And for you, give their life?
Will this person stand by you,
In your troubles help you through;
When inconvenient to be your friend,
Are they with you to the end?
In this person do you trust,
In a friendship it is a must?
About your welfare, do they care,
Their closet secrets will you share?
With this person you do walk,
About everything you do talk;
On this person you do depend,
Hold on to them, a rare true friend.
Author notes
This was my first poem since I started writing poetry again. My icebreaker into my reemergence as a poet. Its what I feel a real friend is and I hope to be to the people I call my friends. The photo was taken by my dad and is my two youngest siblings Ben and Zoe in Galviston, Tx. They are 5 and 7 and are best friends as well as brother and sister. They are the perfect example of what a friendship should be like. As close as family. This poem was written October 28th 2007.
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very good... this is ... wow... my brother and i used to be like that... then well i dunno... but this is great
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What happened?
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aaw good luck. thats so sweet i love your rhyming.
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Thanks
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This is a beautiful poem. It showed what a true freindship really is. This was very touching. Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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Thanks.
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true... friends should be that close and people in relationships should be even closer... thank you for entering and i wish you the best of luck...
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Thanks for taking the time to read and good luck judgeing.
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wow. this is way good. it sounded a little, i don't know how to say it but it was good none the less. its really cool overall. good luck and good write.
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Forced or cliche is the words generally use to descibe it. I see that now but i dont think it was to bad for my first attempt at writing again.
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I loved this. It reminds me of so many of my good friends. Thanks for entering. This was excellent. Best of luck.
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Your welcome. Good luck with the contest.
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Galveston Island!!!
Ha...brings back many many memories. . .okay, sorry. .it's a Texas thang innit?
I will leave this entry in the contest, even though it's a little left of center. I understand how I feel about the first write Im actually able to put together is a little special. A runt..
And what happens to Wilbur the famous Pig?
Thank you for this piece, I think the pic is beautiful.
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Thanks for the comment. This was the first in a while.
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Oh this was really sweet.. It brought tears to my eyes..very girly of my I know.
But it was just so touching.. I see that the picture was taken in Galviston, Tx.. I didn't live to far from there not 8 years ago... I miss it so much, and that picture is just beautiful... You did so well with this.. The emotion in it was strongly felt... Well done..
Jetleena
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Its written for my friends that have been there for me over the years. My kind of tribute to them.
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I think even without the picture, you've still mangaged to get out what you wanted to convey but at the same time, I couldn't help but notice a trend you like to use word-wise and that 'strife'. Be a bit more creative in trying to steer away from that word in the future sometimes
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Yes your right about ising that word to much but I like it. It usually is a good word to describe what I'm trying to convey in a poem. I really need to quit coupleing it with life though in my rhyme.
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I think that the sweet enduring friendship you portrayed here is along with the photographic evidence of its existence makes for a wonderful poem. I think your choice of icebreaker was a good one, starting off on a positive note. One person suggestion I have would be to align your photo and poem in the center, I think it would flow with the rhyming scheme you so brilliantly put into place. Keep on writing, even if in spurts!
Thank you for taking the time to comment on my poem!
~Storm
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Thank you. I never thought of going with a center alighn,ent but it works well.
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wonderful! Cute little poem; it means so much.... Your rhyme is nice and it has good flow throughout...
Great job
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I've found it amusing how you can take simple words and simple lines and make them into such meaningful pieces. The best poets arent the ones with the biggest vocabularies they are the ones who say the most effeciently.
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great job, and good rhyme!
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Thank You!
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Beautiful and sweet! I like the rhyme!
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Thanks I prefer to write in rhyme and most of my poems are rhyme. Its just seems a little more artful if that makes sense.
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Nice
Wow, thats axactly how a true friend should be. You have captured it perfectly. Keep writing! :-)
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I've been fortunate enough to have friends like this during my life and this poem is kind of a tribute to them.
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Very fine poem, you are the man
Good job and glad you are emerged.
I apologize for givin you sech a hard time. My bad.
I hope I can make it up to you, sir.
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Hey its all cool. Thanks for the comment.
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Very nice. It brought some memories to my mind of some really great friends who fit this description, as well as some let downs. May you be blessed with many such friendships!
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Hopefully this poem reminds everyone of current or past friendships because real true friends are really hard to find and they make your life so much better. Thanks for the comment.
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This poem posed a lot of questions relevant to what a true friend is, it is thought provoking and really sends the message home. A very good portrayal of emotion and expression of what your inner thoughts are. Congratulations on this poem it is very well done for your first one Good rhyming skills to, not many poets use aabb which I found worked well here.
hope you don't mind but I just found one gramatical error:
'Are they be with you to the end?' [are] should be [Will] or alternativley [be] should be [there]... that's the only line that disrupts the otherwise flawless flow of this peice (hope you don't mind me correcting you.)
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No I dont mind you correcting me at all. Thats alot of why I'm on this site is to get help with my poetry. This is actually one of my older but simple pieces.
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A great poem about true friendship. Rhythm and rhyme in this write is excellent.
A wonderful tribute to your friend.
Thanks for sharing this with us...
From another friend...Sue
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Thank You Ms Sue. I really had to rediscover how to find my muse and the only real positive thing i had going in my life at the time was a really good friend that was helping me out alot.
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This is a really good poem Jaq, I like what it's about and it has a cute little tone to it... a good poem about a true rare friend!
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Thank You Britty. Good friends are really hard to find today when you have a culture that says its acceptable to ditch someone because things arent going smooth.
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