I pass you on the street. I share a time with you.
What infection do you carry that makes so aphotic?
Was it a seminal event or over time did it accrue?
What happened in your life that turned your outlook so chaotic?
I see you in your darkness, disdainful of the world.
Your eyes void of emotion, your mouth a classic moue.
You hold a blank expression, your lips are slightly curled,
but somewhere in that darkness resides a lonely you.
Your façade is tissue - I see the hurt trapped in your eyes
and I am touched by empathy, I know that you are lost.
Does a spark still burn within? Do you use darkness as a guise?
Is there an unseen reason that our paths have crossed?
So often we put blinders on, ignoring what we see
while we shed tears of loss over our humanity.
We do not recognize that it’s our own lethargy.
The problem lies within us all including you and me.
And so I pass on by and I’m the only one aware
that you could be my friend, my sister, or my child.
I do not offer comfort. I do not show I care.
Your darkness bleeds on me and in my soul's compiled.
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Picture Credit: TrinityDemonia (http://photobucket.com/mediadetail/TrinityDemonia/1129477492gothicartvp3.jpg)
A contest entry
- Dark Poetry! by BeautifullyBroken42.
300 points, ended May 6, 2008, 36 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
Comments
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That is so true!! Sometimes when you are forced into situations which are too close for comfort or extremely 'real', you are instinctively wanting to ignore the fact that you are even aware of the said situation existing! Your poem was very beautiful in its clarity of the poet's emotions.The phrases, "I see you in your darkness" and "I know that you are lost." instantly endear themselves to the reader. I particularly loved the last 2 lines "I do not offer comfort. I do not show I care. Your darkness bleeds on me and in my soul's compiled."
Oh,just a great write!!
Best of luck!
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