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Please Walk With Me?




Perhaps seriousness does fan your brow,
but that is fine for it touches me too -
Unpredictability's a bright smile
that streaks across wild personality,
I will be your friend if you'll walk with me.


So many combinations that make us,
character is a dark spiralled staircase
which spins our spirits into distant realms.
If you walk with me I will be your friend.


Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love,
it matters not for laughter will surface
and wrap the warm days into the cool nights.
If you are afraid then please walk with me.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    November 14
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    No matter the day

    or what night shall bring

    we still have a moment

    when the sparrow sings

    Close out at the world

    set your spirit free

    have no fears

    just walk with me


  • mea-masako
    November 14
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    awesome.... great...amazingly written...

    loving it!!


  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 27
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  • bellagio girl
    October 15

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    I loved the poem, especially the part, recognizing that we are all chidlren, deep inside, the same as always, just the shell gets older.


  • Mila Aqua
    October 7
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    Good poem~
    Thank-you very much for entering.
    I can't find any animals in this, but
    I enjoyed reading it anyway. Mila


  • Ellegirl silver member
    October 4

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    I love the echo that keeps reoccurring in your poem" I'll be your friend if you
    please walk with me." Sometime there's a need to know a friend will
    be there...the echo still rings...

  • Nameless-Faceless
    October 3

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    I like this - you've used some interesting metaphors and ideas, and the nature of the words are both unpredictable and soothing. There's really something cathartic about it.

    Great write.

  • lifeinthealt
    October 3
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    Great!

    This is awesome, great flow.


  • laura0757 gold member
    September 29

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    wonderful

    i can read your stuff, all day, but time is of the essence. I enjoy them so much and feel like such an ametuer in comparison, but the line in which you say if your afraid please walk with me, refreshing way of writing, out of my league but so what............and thanks for your comments they are recieved with appreciation


  • AlexandraHamilton
    September 23

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    I liked this very much. It was sweet, beautiful, and full of feeling. Well written.


  • Room without doors gold member
    September 16

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    Outstanding

    This is a poem about friendship -about reaching out to people and accepting them for who they are. We all need the love of those around us - without it life would be impossible. Best of luck in the contest.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    September 15

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    As I read this, tears are streaming down my face. God, Ian why does thou touch my heart so! I've been feeling out-of-sorts for awhile, and he read a poem that I try to layer as much as I can to hide the obvious, pain. Though we are across seas, he reached out, and of course made me laugh, and directs me towards this poem and helps to realease the fanthom, called supressed sadness.

    Thank you my dear friend!


  • AbundantBetrayals
    September 10

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    this was such a sweet poem; everyone needs someone to count on when they are feeling down or afraid of something, a friend is something precious and you have managed to convey that and the heart of one into your poem well done
    as always beautiful
    ~Betrayals


  • evergreens
    September 10
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    good

    It touches a raw nerve in the heart! Fine poem.


  • Nature Song silver member
    September 7
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    If you are afraid then please walk with me~ The poem gives way to understanding and kindness even when a person has faults, were are still willing to look past them.

    Creative and awesome write!

    ~Sie


  • Genevieve79
    September 7

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    Really like this, very complex if you read into it, but somewhat simple at the surface. I like the visuals, I.E. dark spiraled staircase... takes you on a little journey. Short but deep...


  • myrataal silver member
    September 7

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    This simply stays one of your very best poems, ever.


  • Goofypryo
    September 6

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    Really Awesome.

    I really enjoyed your poem, it sounded like a conversation I once had, lol! It was very enjoying...great work. Will check more of your work later.


  • KyeosheZ
    September 6
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    That is a very sweet poem.


  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    September 6

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    Excellent

    A great show of human emotions,reaching out to anyone who will be a friend and walk the same path as you. Great deapth here showing a generous heart.


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 6

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    I loved this. I loved the first line of the last stanza, because I like to believe that. Some people I wonder if this is true, or if they were ever children at all, but you have done a brilliant job with this poem.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

  • reveller silver member
    September 6

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    On the floor again !

    Beautiful........there isn't any more words to describe it adequately !


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 6

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    More 'swirls' of thought taking us on a ride with you. Your title captured my attention...then your poem captured my thoughts. Nicely done...Alby


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 6

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    ah, i did not recognize the title, but upon reading the line realized i've been here before. i do enjoy this entire poem, but in particular your third stanza somehow speaks to me in smiles.

    very nice.


  • Hillz0rz
    September 6
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    lovely. so very lovely.


  • char-char
    September 6

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    character is a dark spiraled staircase
    which spins our spirits into distant realms.

    That line alone is worth this applause!
    Keep up the work.

    XoXo,
    Char-Char


  • Spiritual Soul
    September 5
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    Apparently I've already read this...? But I think I would remember a piece like this! I think it lies lol


  • Spiritual Soul
    September 5

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    I love this, I love the child like feeling you get when reading this.

    "Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
    we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love,
    it matters not for laughter will surface"

    I love those lines!! They are so true. This is probably one of my favorite poems, I just love it. I love the repetition of "walking with me" It's kind of like walking through life, having that person walk with you, at least to me.

    Thank you so much for sharing this!! I'm so glad you entered it because I don't think I would even have found it!
    ~Michaela~

  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    September 4
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    simply amazing

    Please walk with me.


  • KaylaSHIKARI
    September 2
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    Loved it.
    I'm speechless...
    good luck in my contest!


  • shannonbananan
    September 1
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    this is still my favorite poem just had to read it again...


  • anna3
    August 31

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    great

    Maybe not often with you here but always around sometimes hand in hand this time is not so short at all we still have time to enjoy each other you are my friend forever


  • PurpleAraucana
    August 29

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    tantrums or not,
    brood or dance.
    swirled love, and,
    indeed, laughter will surface.

    a friendly poem.


  • Marilyn Lott
    August 28

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    Great poem!

    Getting uncondtional love is the best kind of friendship we can have. This poem shows that's the sort of friend you are.

    Warm Wishes,
    Marilyn


  • Camille Morin gold member
    August 25

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    Oh, my. We are now connected forever. The promise of laughter surfacing...please let me walk with you.
    Love,
    Camille


  • sinfull
    August 20

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    Poetic phrase ..lovely!

    I see colors and read self-assurence and this is so creative in expression. I found no awkward spots..read it outloud to be sure and it flows . unmetered but still contains a rhythm that suits the message. Nice job!


  • seriouswheels731
    August 19
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    Nice

    It's very moving, a warm gesture of a promise, a mutual love, requested so sweetly, nice write man, quite moving. =)


  • mgmc gold member
    August 17

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    Lovely Sentiments

    I like the sentiments in this poem and they're delivered with great imagery, Last line in poem speaks most eloquently. You are, as generally acknowledged, a very talented poet


  • Horrific Hollis
    August 17

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    "Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart"
    I loved that line. ^^
    Something just draws me to it,
    i'm not sure what it is.
    Good write. =]


  • pranj
    August 17
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    Hmm...a very good write.
    thanks for the entry...!
    character is a dark spiralled staircase - ha!great line!

    thanks again,
    -pranj


  • weathergirl123
    August 16
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    "Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart"
    And more people need to show their inner child, by crikey!

  • chiefmac
    August 14

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    Ths reader is treated to walk..slow deliberate, smile without pretending. Friendship brings sharing moments in laughter of warmth of day and cool nights. Friendship defined with images that take the reader by the heart to explore what is inside themselves


  • Net
    August 13

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    Another masterpiece! How incredible you are. This is exceptional and I truly love it.


  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    August 10

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    Love this. Especially this.
    Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
    we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love,
    it matters not for laughter will surface
    Great job!


  • marebyte
    August 9
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    Endearing, Unconditional Love and tender care.
    I pure delight to read and I will walk with you. Hehehe

  • judmc
    August 5

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    Nice One !

    A nice meaningfull concilatory poem for one suffering a bereavement. Some nice
    imagery in evidence and well chosen words. Good Luck in the contest..George...


  • cheaphotelsign
    August 1

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    quit making me cry, damnit...lol
    this reminded me of my favorite poem by james kavanaugh...
    beautiful as always and deserving of infinite praise....love love it


  • Blac-sol
    July 28
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    companionship..

    thats beautiful, i love this

    'character is a dark spiralled staircase
    which spins our spirits into distant realms.'

    so true but mostly, you describe it with the depth it has, showing that you will take them as they are and you understand. willing to look past the surface and go deep to explore who they are, you are truly in not just asking for companionship but, you are offering them yours, unconditionally with all the patience they might need.

    its a beautiful write, thank you for sharing..


  • MJ Forgives
    July 28
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    To me this poem seemed so warm to me. I really enjoyed reading it.


  • AngeloCacciato
    July 28

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    Sweet Simplicity

    It was very simple but it warmed me. Its like when you think back to your past and remember your first best friend {just makes ya feel all warm and fuzzy inside lol} I think it is a wonderful poem and it warms my heart...hope my comment helped


  • HopelessDreams
    July 28

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    I love when a man recognizes that he is still a child at heart, and that everyone still is in ways. It's like he's not trying to be the "big man" most men are so caught up in trying to be. This is a very simple, yet cute and still wonderfully written piece. Good job


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 28

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    such tenderness to be found in a man with gnarled hands
    cliché perhaps, but i'd walk with you (yea i told you, not quite original )
    beautiful write my dear ...... again


  • Night Terrors
    July 28
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    wow that is great I am sure we have all felt afraid like this and just longed for someone to be there with us. I think that you have captured the child like way that we as adults try to hide. You really have done a great job on this. You have excellent imagery and a great flow. I read this out loud and it was seamless. A wonderful job.


  • SezmeKnuHart
    July 28
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    This is amazing, I love it.


  • shannonbananan
    July 28

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    i really love this poem. it has so much feeling and gives u a peek into ur soul. and the language is so colorful. i wish i could write like that. this poem is short yet it says so much. u truly have talent. u should help me with some of my poems


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 28

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    Simply astounding, Um, walk with you if Im afraid??? I know how you are mister, you would push me deep into the shadows and let me be eaten alive lol. J/k
    This is another well penned piece, now come on really, this one is your best yet.


    Passions


  • DoubtsMartyr
    July 28

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    warming

    I love the feeling I get from this poem. It feel like these lines could calm the winds of the most terrifying typhoon. Bravo! XD


  • elemental angel
    July 28
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    friends x


  • red stiletto
    July 28

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    Tantrums or not.


    Gorgeous - sounds a bit ecclesiastical.

    ''Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
    we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love"

    Yes we bloody - well can !




  • wandyway
    July 25
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    Wonderfully comforting

    The repetition of "walk with me" though, makes me think that the narrator needs company too. The title is also a question, so they seem hesitant to enforce themselves on the other, which is lovely, because it contrasts amazingly with the confidence of your spectacular vocabulary.

    "Unpredictability's a bright smile
    that streaks across wild personality,"
    Holy damn, delicious.

    Stunning as always, and a pleasure to read.

    Thank you for entering, and good luck x


  • poeticpresumption
    July 24
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    thank you for the lovly commentand blimey you are popular arnt you and im not suprised you write amazingly well

  • albymyheart gold member
    July 24
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    WTF! I just noticed 333 comments on this! Damn, you are popular!


  • albymyheart gold member
    July 24
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    Just lovely. I like the carefree acceptance in this write. Yeah, nothing is ever perfect, but walk with me and we can be imperfect together. Well Done...Alby


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 24
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    Very nice, almost charming quality to this piece. I like the way it looks for connection. Thanks for sharing.


  • Botchla
    July 22
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    Thank you, but that's the only poem up that I didn't myself write. haha. I wanted to save it for a friend.

    I feel like I relate quite a bit to this poem. I really like the care free yet serious, the wild yet well formed demeanor of the whole thing. The refrain, especially the last line, hit me the most.
    I'm glad I read this.


  • XxNinjaNemoxX
    July 19
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    A new take at the prompt
    I like it
    xoxo.


  • Vernal Bloom
    July 16
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    This poem! I found the link a strange area!! Good to read it again!


  • Dezzy26
    July 15

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    Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
    we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love.

    This was well put... this poem was well written. Thankyou for entering my contest and good luck. I will be looking over them all again closer to closing.


  • ProtectedMemory
    July 13

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    This is a really good poem! I loved the line "Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart" because I can really relate to that and know adults in my life who fit that description. Throughout this entire poem though you did a great job with mood, emotion, word choice, and vocab. If there is one thing you are lacking though I think it is setting. In poetry, setting is not always used, but in this particular poem I think you could very easily add a short single stanza about the setting, just to help the readers visualize. The entire poem is really good though and flows beautifully!


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    July 13

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    it matters not for laughter will surface
    and wrap the warm days into the cool nights.
    If you are afraid then please walk with me.

    I liked those lines the best.

    Great write!


  • AllOverItNow
    July 13
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    Wonderful imagery here. Not entirely clear exactly what the poem is about. But i did enjoy it. Nicely penned, Im tempted to count exactly how many metaphors you managed to use, but ill leave it as i dont want to spoil it for myself.
    Great write! Thank you for sharing!


  • CrazyWalnut09
    July 13

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    Its interesting but really doesn't make much sense to me with the way its written. However, I still like it.


  • robena
    July 13

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    man! you absolutly to me to another place. shoot im ready for that walk now. this is a deep and beautiful poem thanks for shareing


  • Jfd
    July 13

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    "Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
    we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love,
    it matters not for laughter will surface
    and wrap the warm days into the cool nights."

    GREAT imagery here, this really blew me away......overall, this poem had a calming effect, for me i pulled a subtle religious theme from this, which usually would turn me off, but this poem was very enjoyable.....nice job


  • AndrianTimeswift
    July 13

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    Beautiful! Simply beautiful! This is a beautiful snapshot of friendship (one of my favorite topics) that I think perfectly captures the emotion of simply walking with a friend. It's beautiful!


  • wander of the sky
    July 13
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    simply wonderful

    "Tantrums or not, we're all children at heart,
    we can brood or dance or pout like swirled love,
    it matters not for laughter will surface
    and wrap the warm days into the cool nights.
    If you are afraid then please walk with me."

    this part brought a smile to my face


  • twelfthknight silver member
    July 13

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    this is such a beautifull calming poem, I love the flow and the images your rich words create, I always enjoy reading your work

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    July 13

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    Oh, my dear friend... this is a lovely combination of what you do best.
    You have used imagery ( what you do best)and mixed it with simplicity to
    write a poem that anyone can read and understand. One that can encompass
    a crowd without excluding a single reader. There is always going to be someone
    who at one time or another goes through a period in their life when they need
    that someone to outstretch their hand and be there for them.

    I can totally understand why so many people love this piece, it is because they can all relate to it. They can all visualize it in their own lives! Their own childlike moment when everything is going wrong and they just want someone to hug them and tell them that everything is going to be okay... they don't have to be afraid any longer. For some... that moment is when they turn to God... for others
    that moment is when they found their best friend, for others it might have been when they fell in love... there was a moment in everyones life when they made that strong bond and knew that there was another person that they could always ... ALWAYS count on!

    Yeah... You really wrote one outstanding poem when you wrote this one, you should be extremely proud of it. I can learn tons from this piece, and I will be studying it to take from it everything that I possibly can!

    Thank you so much for sending me this link, writers like you can do nothing but benifit my stay here on the site. Again, thank you!

    Suzi


  • sexy emo fairy
    June 25
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    wonderfully done. thank you for entering.


  • Aalta
    June 20

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    this is just so beautiful I read it over and over again thrice.... and still am left wanting more... it is the absolute truth that most of us are tantrum throwing children and remain so even at great ages only we act to be grown ups.... the ending is so beautiful.... just to walk together

    the flow and simplicity of the words are awesome....
    great emotions and expression
    superb write!!

    Thank you for sharing this exceptional write

  • LovingPhoenix
    June 13
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    Incredible write. So true!


  • TheLyricsArePoetry gold member
    June 11

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    i'm walking with you! this is an amazing write on friendship - you bear your heart with such beauty and emotion. i envy your gift. a magic piece... if anyone tells you any different, they dont know poetry or the heart like you do xx


  • justlikelivin
    June 6
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    Gret!

    This is really great, I hope that you do well in the contest!


  • bluefirerose
    June 6

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    It's a good poem, but not exactly what I'm looking for; I was hoping for something funny, not something sweet. Feel free to re-enter.

  • Topnotchsy
    June 4

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    I was scanning the list of most popular poems of all time on the site (no better place to find great reads on this site) and I came across this gem.

  • Judith Chandler
    May 30
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    You are walking but on what kind of shoes?

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • allmusicplayed
    May 28
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    /AMAZING!

    to this, i think i can more than relate! keep it up!


  • bana bini
    May 27

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    brilliant

    I find this 'terribly romantic'. I just want to read it over and over again, and each time I do, I find new meaning in new words. No wonder your poem was in the all-time-best poems thingy. Great poem, and you're really an inspiration. :]


  • drifter
    May 26
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    i find it romantic.. very nice! ;p


  • Ms-Mouse
    May 25
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    Well thought out, and different.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    May 23

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    What a wonderful entreaty, these are the simple things which warm the soul, the extension of a hand in harmony to walk the land, aye, put away the differences and don't let them encroach upon the light and lighter days, let's chance the dance of dallience. Please Walk With Me has a soothing voice with spiritual overtones, a pleasure to promenade with.


  • All I Love
    May 23
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    Such a beautiful write, I can feel a real yearning in this poem.

  • Night Terrors
    May 22
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    that was really good. lots of depth I found that a fasinating write all around!


  • Tarja
    May 22

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    Your word choice was brilliant. The message written within this is made of win and I really found it to be something of great depth and talent. Those last few lines in particular moved me tremendously. Really... well done. And ... ffft I don't know how you didn't get a trophy because this was FLAWLESS.


  • Heksie
    May 22
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    Perfectly said


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    May 15

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    Very good write and good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your poem and it was a pleasure to read.


  • Truetome
    May 15

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    what a lovely write this is! I just really love this. this is what friendship is about ... acceptance with our differences, and smiling all throughout.... what a joy to read this. thank you. L,

  • Anne Hulls
    May 7
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    this was good

    this was good for what i know about poetry.


  • white stone
    May 3

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    Yeah, bro, I can see why this is so popular. 450 applause, jeez. Humbling. Yes, we are all children sometimes, throwing tantrums with seriousness fanning our brows.
    This makes me want to hang out with you.


    (from white stone's angry martian child's doppelganger)

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