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Blemished Heartstrings



Questions, bounce back and forth

and I'm left with the numbness of hurt,

like all those many times before.

The clash of circumstances,

the difference of life's decisions

made us so very different -

and yet, our hardships brought us,

closer together.

The moment of true madness,

is when our heart's locked together.

I said I loved you first and yet shared,

the sensations deeper and I nearly falter

in fear of unknowing dangers [to my heart].

But do the melodies of last Monday's

and troublesome Tuesday's stay the same,

throughout our relationship;

[sometimes I forget we are a couple today

though your 'baby' reminds me of yesterday].

Can you even acknowledge my agro,

in the moment of madness, love hinders us

leaving us almost blind and paralyzed,

maybe you placed me here on purpose -

but who needed to try.

I love you and I guess I always will,

some things fade over time -

like bitter arguments and broken tides

though the yearning in my heart never dies,

when your name blocks my inner thoughts

and captures all my senses, I am controlled -

by your lover's complexion and I come to adore

the simple way you utter my name in heaven.

For whenever heaven opens it's gates,

I am sure I will find what I've been looking for -

the answer to love's questions.

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 26
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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    "I am controlled -
    by your lover's complexion and I come to adore
    the simple way you utter my name in heaven."

    Loved that little bit dear, and the whole piece as well of course, and best of luck in the contest my sweet.


    Love and peace always,
    Your AP daddy mj.


  • named.disaster--x
    April 9, 2008

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    Magnificent!

    'But do the melodies of last Monday's
    and troublesome Tuesday's stay the same,
    throughout our relationship;
    [sometimes I forget we are a couple today
    though your 'baby' reminds me of yesterday].'

    this would also be my favorite stanza!
    great write . . .
    - Page <3


  • EmeraldNymph
    April 8, 2008
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    wow

    well done please write more


  • Kiss the girl--x
    April 8, 2008

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    'But do the melodies of last Monday's
    and troublesome Tuesday's stay the same,
    throughout our relationship;
    [sometimes I forget we are a couple today
    though your 'baby' reminds me of yesterday].'

    Favourite stanza, you write so beautifully sweetie.
    Always.


  • And Hyetal
    April 6, 2008

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    Sad, but beautiful. This reminds me of all the problems I'm having right now. I can feel all of the emotion inside this poem.

    Wonderful, beautiful write, and good luck in the contest!

    ~Cassie


  • Glasyalabolas
    April 6, 2008

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    This piece is very sad, but there are twinges of hope and it neither cascades towards hopelessness nor does it wallow.

    It's funny, when we write about love we should be writing about it in and with happyness, yet all to often we are left to write about the pain it causes.

    Good write.

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