Time to escape, drop nightshade drape, spring sprightly sings fresh air,
shed strings, red tape of every shape, fresh future fair prepare.
Shift key, click mouse, write waltz like Strauss, carouse in harmony,
drown frowns, don't grouse laze louse round house, spurn tale_spin gravity.
Time to rebound, life’s boat aground goodbye waves tidal waves,
from hurts that hound heart thought strung, bound, a clear approach now braves
life’s slings and arrows, narrow minds, discovers empathy,
that brings marshmallows, wide wings hallows, sheds self-sympathy.
From sleepy head, depressed in bed, leap up, cheered frame of mind,
misfortune's sped away, ahead, lies joy, leave lies behind.
Dread, pain vain bled, is shed instead success unbolts faults’ door,
so have a ball, reverse free fall, displace dark doubts with SURE !
Don't hedge your bets, glad sad regrets turns topsy-turvy soon,
don't sit on fence in self defence, self-confidence is boon.
Let inner fire inspire desire, suspicions set at rest,
all you require, adore, admire, won't cloy, - enjoy with zest.
From vain complain move on again, see sea's brim full of fish,
go take your pick as lips you lick so wickedly delish.
Look sharp ! Don't carp, distress or mess up opportunities
Chance offers all, go have a ball with fresh prior-I-tease !
If once distraught in heart or thought, trust must fuss dust displace,
move on to more - unseen before - let better bad replace.
From inner trial advance and smile, past tears, fears fast forgot,
prick cloudy pall, go have a ball and call each shot !
Hope's heart's at ease when spirit frees harp's soul from sharks, sharp spears,
DO as YOU please and by degrees all darkness disappears,
bread butters fly, sun spo[r]ts in sky, relearn to laugh a lot,
keep on the ball, leap each grey wall – bold, spurning blow cold, hot !
Link one to one, new tale begun, soon shadow shades dissolve,
don’t stumble, run ! don’t cry, have fun ! hands on luck’s clock revolve.
mosquito bite quite fly-by-night seems past controversy
compared to light solutions bright that crush adversity.
So turn past page, move on fast, stage recovery fulfilled,
no need to wage war ‘gainst all rant and rage are stilled.
Let dream themes teem, perhaps as team, if not your’s is the choice !
Of cream the cream you are, ‘twould seem ‘tis time to heed YOUR VOICE !
So seize the day ! go out and play ! clear way awaits, transparent,
always at ease, dark shadow flees, with happiness apparent.
No longer strange, the season's change seeds cycle optimistic,
danger exchange rebirth free-range, no limits pessimistic.
Leave strife, love life, wed man and wife, read palms - charms endless show.
Share tenderness, groans, cares chase ! guess ! great happiness grows glow.
So here we end, send 'Good Luck! ' trend as on your way you trot, -
go have a ball, no cares at all, stand tall, walls fall ! WHY NOT ?
Author notes
robi3_1193_robi3_0000 XXX_EKX
tale_spin : both tale spin and tailspin
Wor[l]ds in [b)rackets convey two or more meanings
sun spo[r]ts = either sun spots or sun sports as in movement
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A contest entry
- - Time to Take a Walk - by Desire.
700 points, ended April 9, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Feel the Quote by CapturedMoon.
1200 points, ended May 14, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Please cheer me up by fading memories.
400 points, ended June 13, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Beginnings by Borglesnarf.
1500 points, ended March 7, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me something - ANYTHING - happy!!! by WednesdayJade.
700 points, ended May 3, 27 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Writes ~ A Going Away Contest by SizzyFid.
2200 points, ended August 12, 106 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Strange New Beginings by ShinigamiAlchemist.
400 points, ended October 26, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Overcome the impossible. by bballer21.
625 points, ends November 25, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Comments
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Such a bright and uplifting write.
Brilliantly done.
Congrats on all your trophies so far, well deserved.
Best of luck
Love
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This is a very interesting and creative poem. Nicely written. Thank you for entering.
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nice write, a little long but really good. it was cutee. and very nicely penned, loved the rhymes : ) thanks for entering and good luckk.
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Amazing
wow this one is very well thought out, each rhyme is so perfect I am truly amazed by your skill with word craft! I had to slow down to catch every rhyme making the pace easy and relaxed. It made me take in every word. congrats and thanks for entering good luck
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Such genuine encouragement no fault could ever find
within advice writ words are wisely reasoned read devine
Favorite lines amongst many.."From vain complain move on again, see sea's brim full of fish,go take your pick as lips you lick so wickedly delish."
A very uplifting and revitaling pep talk to the public, you rawk Jonathan.
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i am a slow reader---too bad for me this took FOREVER to read lol but it was worth it this reminds me of a chant that m kindergarten teacher would read to us but we would have absolutely no idea what it meant! lol i love the maturity of the words-i had to look up a few actually haha but thank you for entering my contest! i won't judge for awhile so there's still a chance!
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wow. thanks for sharing. i reckon this could put a smile on anyones face. it carries a great message. good luck in the contest and keep writing!
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This made me smile yet the pace of it was sooo FAST!
Thank you for sharing this with me and congratulations on all the trophies this has one!
Best to you,
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put me in a good mood, like the person beneath me said, but it's pace was too fast for my taste. Good poem though.
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BRAVO!! just reading this poem has put me in a good mood it's full of live and flows nicely making the readers head bob along while reading Good Luck!!
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excellent poem as evidenced by all the trophies, awesome lryical and fun in nature. I wouldnt change a thing.
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I love the rhythm of this piece.
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Congratatulations ...
on your trophies, even though I can't imagine how "vain complain" kept you in any contest.
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Hello Jim,
The anagram for NIRVANA being I RAN VAIN hope's (com)plain complete role-reversale competes replete with colloquialisms ... delish
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This poem completely wraps around the prompt. The happy, let loose tone applied well. Good job! This is exactly what I want to see. I love the moral of this poem, and I love that you chose this prompt. There's too much morose poetry now a days. Even the background matches the tone. How happy!
As far as suggestions, I like the layout of this poem over all, but I do feel like the rhyming was a bit forced. Instead of rolling off the tongue in some points, it freezes up. For example, "Look sharp ! Don't carp, distress or mess up opportunities." I always find I'm distracted from the meaning of the words when the sound of the words takes over.
My favourite line in this poem is "Hope's heart's at ease when spirit frees the soul from fears, from tears." Although the rhyme is a bit overdone, the meaning of this is very strong and it touched me. I could feel all my problems sliding free of my mind's grasps, and that's exactly what writing should do. Make me feel something!
Thank you for entering and please, keep writing!
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Really Cool!
It Made Me Smile
well done and keep writing
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A lovely bag of sweets.
And I see it's been shared around a bit!
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Just wonderful feel good poetry. I thank you kindly for sharing this with me. ~Pamela
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This is wonderful! It actually made me smile! haha too many of the poems on AP are about misery and darkness. It's nice to finally see one about happiness. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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This is a really nice poem. Thank you for entering.
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LOL This had me rolling. I loved the rhyme. LOL I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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Great poem Nicely written poem. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck on your others as well
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Absolutely wonderful. A work of art.
Jenny -
Inspiring piece you got here. You've opened up from awe-inspiring to thought-provoking then to reassuring triggers to the reader's heart
Love the rhymes, although it may be too much but that is fine with me.
The 15th line didn't need that [r], it kind of spoils the flow a little bit; I don't think a touch of dirty pretty is needed for a whimsical write such as this
Aside from that, this is definitely a great read: easy, witty and just plain wonderful
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This is nice. Inspiring, philosophical and cool!
I like it
Thanks a bunch for entering and best of luck to you in my contest
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This is a very nice poem, i LOVE the background, thank you for entering, and good luck
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Inspiring!
This is a very powerful poem. If I tried I'd probably spend hours uncoding it as it is so deep. I love how wide spread your vocabulary is. A great summer poem.
Best of luck in my contest, and good luck to you,
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Was this your own inspiration or did you use one listed? Please place the answer in your AN.
It was a very motivational poem. I almost felt like going out, that is if it wasn't 3:30 am. Thank you for the entry.
Thank you,
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Awsomeness
Verry good write, I enjoyed it thank you verry much for sharing this with me. Made me feel a bit better =)
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wow! I can only see why this won so many trophys.. it is an excellent write indeed, the best of wishes to you in our conest
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I loved this! it made me feel alot better. i think my friend would like this one as well. it was well written. keep up the good work! thanks for entering our contest and good luck!
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The rhyme and rhythm in this is fantastic, and you chose your words with great precision. I am moved by your piece.
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I really enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme throughout the poem it really added life to it. And also your alliterations are brilliant. This made me feel like partying and having a great time. Really cheery poem.
Well done
I guess what's sort of annoying is that I think you should give other poems which don't have as many trophies the chance to also win.. Maybe move on and write other bigger and better things and win new trophies.. just a thought.
Great writing
Maria
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this is a very good poem
i think the rhyming is fab
very happy
thanks for entering my contest
good luck xx
from Forgotten
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Lots of laughs
Such a galloping rhythm just drives me onward to the end. A funny ending, and apparently quite relevant to some AP readers.
I especially liked your variable in-line rhyming, your creative use of words (e.g., "prior-I-tease" ) and phrases/concepts (e.g., "From vain complain move on again").
From my personal standpoint, "Although distraught in heart or thought when trust you may misplace,", "From inner trial advance and smile," do not fully address the space in which I find myself. How would you know that, though? I do like the style of this piece and the smiles and chuckles it gave me, thank you.
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This is very good. I'm not in the best mood tonight and this poem really cheered me up. I love the line " From inner trial advance and smile, tears past and fast forgot, go have a ball, take up Fate's call in future call each shot!" That made me smile. Great write. Good luck in my contest.
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Ah, how I love rhyme! You're bloody good at it aren't you?
"From vain complain move on again the sea is full of fish
go take your pick as lips you lick so wickedly delish."
My favourite lines. I also love the way you play with words; your vocabulary is impressive.
Lively and cheerful, nicely done.
Thank you for your entry.
David.
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Very Good
I really liked the rhythym of it, and the crack about attention spans being short. lol
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i loved this poem, it warmed my heart, thank you, to tell you the truth this was the kind of uplifting poem i needed right now.
my favorite line was "DO as YOU please and by degrees all darkness disappears"
it made me feel sunshiny! lol
great write!
thanks for sharing it. it made my day.
Faerie Tale Fantasy
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im sorry the thing is i don't want him to leave. this sounds like hes breaking up with me and hes not.
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Yes, no one is as hard on us, as we are on ourselves...
Eddy
tech:
I believe you meant span not scan in this line
"for some attention (span) is very short"
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This was wonderful, and I really think Zannah will smile over this one.
The trophys were well deserved,
Thank you for entering this for Zannah,
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I always like to read a happy poem, especially when they are also good poems =D
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this is so good and cheery it made me smile! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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interesting
This is quite the interesting write! I like how you took a chance on entering a cheer-you-up poem, even though I'm not in the mood to be cheered up from that. It's an awesome poem! I want you to know that. I hope I'm in the mood for this when time comes to judge.
I love the way it rhymes...not only on the end, but within the lines, too.
Thanks for entering & good luck!
~Bright
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intresting. I like it!
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aww this is just so lively. a very fun write, and i had so much fun reading it. i like the imagery in this poem. it was pretty vivid. its not only fun, but it also had a great message. i really loved it. keep penning, and thanks so much for the entry
All the best
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thank you for entering. It was a fun poem.
I loved it
Good luck
Kitty23
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This poem is so fun! It makes me smile!
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this is a powerful poem and the rhyme scheme is genius! you have a wide vocabulary and a brilliant message. i'm sure you know your poem is amazing and it's won plenty of trophies. i don't feel this poem would change a suicide's mind specifically because it's not clearly based on the meaning of life and how important it is not to kill yourself. don't get me wrong, it's a beautiful poem but it's not what i'm looking for.
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Splendid !
Great Instructions
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Thanks for the entry
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Congrats on all the shining things. (puts sun glasses on) I really like your use of vocabulary. Very well written and thank you for entering.
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You are somewhat right and I really don't complain that often. "The sea is full of fish," as you say, and I do get my share and am better when I do. I think I'm doing my best.
Do you ever feel bad about things youself? Anyway, thank you for this piece and for entering it.
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Thanks for entering my contest. Congrats on all the trophies. I do like the background it is bright and cheerful.
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A very needed smile.
Thank you much a chara for it.
a wonderful write!
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Thanks for the smile!
I so needed that!
good luck in the contest my friend.
-Mandi
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such a happy and pretty poem! thanks for the entry and best of luck!
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Thank you for entering my contest with a nice poem
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"The world is so full of a number of things", as R.L. Stevenson said. Your poem has a feeling of multiciplicty about it, of richness. There's so much to life and we should remember that.
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This is so funny and cute, that I nearly laughed my butt off, especially when I saw what you had done with "prior-I-tease"! Great play on words there!
You have a very strong command of poetic device and language. Well done, and thanks for entering!
Laura, aka Immortal
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I do like this one, thank you sir.
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metaphors and imagery top notch the words you used painted a great picture
finalist welcome to it :]
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Brilliant ! This is a great, uplifting poem. I'm inspired by this to and determined to 'have a ball'!
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Great job on this one. I adore the rhyming you used, and the poem you created. Thanks for entering!
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this is really neat. I liked the last line a lot.
"go have a ball, no cares at all, stand tall, walls fall ! WHY NOT ?"
Nice job!
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this is a very well penned poem and i enjoyed reading it alot, the imagery it has in it is lovely and i love it
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lol
That poem made me smile. Which is a difficult task considering I've kind of been down in the dumps as of late -- but it really lightens the mood; puts a more comical spin on things. It really makes it seem like, though sometimes I feel like I'm dying inside, it really isn't all that bad. Very insightful, and I thank you for the delightful message.
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Made me think of Dr Seus it its way of inspiring and cheerfulness (if that is a word!). It was a good write, sweet and happy. Exactly the pick me up I needed!
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This catches my attention for sure! I loved it; you deff got me to smile and feel perked up. THank you so much; this is a great write. Best of Luck
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Wow, this really stands out, literally. I felt like a teacher correcting a great essay, but the student has illegible handwriting on those yellow pads of ruled paper.
Nonetheless, this was really good. As a matter of fact, I have never quite read a poem like this before.
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Haha, I love this poem, it's so cheery and motivating the rhyming scheme is cool too
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Very nice and unique rhyme scheme and a nice story told. Thanks for entering
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intresting write good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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Interesting. Not exactly Fats Waller style but a good poem. Thanks for entering.
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"prior-I-tease"
You know, it's nice to read something you've written that's both easily comprehended and clever (I'm not too proud to admit that I've read much of your writing with dictionary in hand). "Kicks" (I'm trying not to offend) and giggles are liberating, you've captured that nicely in this poem. -
lotza rhyming that works
very nice and lotza rhyming that works. I see why this has won so much! Thanxxx for entering. One applause per entry before judging. -
I like this, it did make me smile, which is what I wanted
I've never seen that rhyme scheme before, and I have to say that I quite like it! It was almost lyrical in a way.
Good Luck!
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This is wonderful and very inspirational for all to read. I really enjoyed the message you were conveying, well done and all the best for my contest.
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this was definatly fun to read. good luck and thanks for entering!
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Superb
A fantastical write with which I agree. An old Wiccan saying came to mind as I read this: "Do as you will, and harm no one". Is this part of the meaning of this write? Again, well done.
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Very nice! It's different to any others I have read...good luck!
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how fun!
well this is a very "fun" piece to read! It's uplifting and bright and pleasant and smile much hope and optimism...perhaps it's a bit wordy and could be somewhat shortened...but I enjoyed it and it brought a smile to my face and a bit of warmth and positive intentions to my heart! good luck to you!
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As sunny and optimistic as a summer day for a kid after school has let out. Excellent meter, fantastic images and creative use of language. Painted happy images in my head as I read it.
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and tease you do! yet we try and we try and we try...
got any DYNAMITE?!!
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Great write. Keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.
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I really like hiow you wrote this poem. i love how it just flows and the imagery is amazing great write!
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I love how you wrote this poem! I love it, You have done a really good job!
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wow. i like the flow =]
great write
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Wonderfully done with great wording and images. This was a delightful read.
thank you for your entry
best wishes
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Have a Ball!
Oh My Word
This piece had me chuckling
Love the internal-external rhyme...
and felt my toe tapping while You were rapping
Oy! The images that filled my head
These lines grabbed and pulled~
From vain complain move on again the sea is full of fish
go take your pick as lips you lick so wickedly delish.
Look sharp ! Don't carp, distress or mess up opportunities
Chance offers all, go have a ball with fresh prior-I-tease !
Magnificent take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Voice also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I like this one alot to it is very nicely done thank you for sharing this with me goodluck to you in the contest best wishes always
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Hmmm, I thought it was a fun piece too. i am not sure if i caught all the meanings. Good luck to you in the contest.
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Uplifting little piece! I loved the wordplay in this one, made for a fun read. The flow is great as well...this was actually a lot of "fun" to read!
Look sharp ! Don't carp, distress or mess up opportunities
Chance offers all, go have a ball with fresh prior-I-tease !
--Great lines!
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