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the sparrow flies

the sparrow flies
backwards into a tree-
gale force wind

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It's hard to stay indoors when the wind is making all kinds of noises outside.

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  • micol
    April 18, 2008
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    Great opening image, with strong follow through to make the whole thing work. Well done.


  • Odd Thomas
    April 18, 2008
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    i love this haiku, excellent aha moment and very visual and funny, good luck in the contest


  • Swan song gold member
    April 18, 2008
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    Excellent This I have seen very clearlt before myself
    Good hiaku


  • sheltered
    April 12, 2008
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    What a great and twisted image. Excellent.


  • background music
    April 7, 2008
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    Its windy here to. and cold.


  • marlene47 silver member
    April 7, 2008

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    Is this the same wind that's playing havoc with your tin roof?
    Great observation! I can feel its fear.
    Marlene


  • Venugopal gold member
    April 6, 2008
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    A nice haiku to read

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