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Eternal Golden Braid - Escher, Gödel, Bach

 

Escher, Gödel, Bach, together
make mind's music tempo weather
form to storm blocks, light as feather
turn constraints most, far less clever,
see as strictures which tight tether,
not as pictures hell-for-leather
spirit lead to question whether
consistency's illusion ever.

Patterns into patterns weaving
both deceiving, undeceiving,
here perception sees stairs leaving
there inspection stares, seize cleaving.

Somehow someone reconciling
forwards, back, and time a-whiling,
motion into more compiling,
starts ball rolling inwards smiling
outwards treadmills single-filing
round in circles never riling,
ever onwards as the aisle in
fact or fiction sets key styling.

As impressions artist wording
so the poet, insight girding
paints life's canvas sixth sense herding

into bridge for future wording. 

Mind unwinding never minding
dizzy blinding reels from binding
backwards grinding, from behinding,
springs forth for a fourth time binding
far horizons, nearness, finding
that perceptions interwinding
vision skew to keep reminding
constantly of traces grinding.

Keeping tabs on locomotion
through a tableau that commotion
seems, in turmoil, senseless ocean,
stems from structure's subtle potion.

Thus confusion into fusion
tracks intact design solution
ends, means melds without intrusion
'spite apparent convolution,
inks links' thinklings in profusion
to coherency's conclusion
in a trice as revolution
follows former revolution.

As on canvas, outing, inning,
every level underpinning
exits, entrances rolls spinning
out with no precise beginning.

Pattern's blueprint formulation
seen from every angle, station,
heightened by anticipation,
tunes vocation through elation.


Thus, thereby, emancipation
spins from, through, strict forms - sensation
self-sustaining, graduation
from starting point to revelation.

Theme dream on examination

mocks fixed formulae - vocation

centred on an evocation

of infinite re-rotation.

Constant, also, the vibration

of energy whose swift gyration

channels vim swim through migration

of and from no fixed location,

to, from, some conscious bifurcation -

de facto self-perpetuation -

factoring each fresh mutation

in reworked association.

Page sets stage thats soon a-filling
and attention draws which, willing,
keys to context, content, spilling
from poetic pen fulfilling.

Images retinal reeling
showing much, as much concealing,
flowing touch in touch revealing,
knowing such from time time's stealing,
offer insights into feeling
through dimensions thus unsealing
variations on themes peeling
from perceptions wheeling-dealing

round and round with no chance-dancing
as each level all enhancing
contributes to each entrancing
wave with exit, entrance, glancing.

Rendering impressions sending
bending into further bending
humour with perspective lending,
leading where uncondescending ?

Fencing words then fences mending
up, down, sideways, first ascending,
then descending ending, ending
in horizons more appending.

Why continue rhyming chiming,
rapid rhythmic tempo climbing,
further options subtle priming
til atrophy a trophy timing ... ?  

 

 

Author notes

robi3_1590_robi3_0000 XXX_MXX

Background M S Escher Stairs PIC  M C Escher : Relativity



interstanza pic Golden Braid Anu http://flickr.com/photos/anua22a/2299631152/

Spin pic
http://www.flickr.com/photos/simbolism/2388360107/

pic hommage to Escher http://www.flickr.com/photos/anua22a/2085692737/




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  • poetryality silver member
    November 15

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    Your monorhymes are expertly written. The flow of this work is magical and the art is supreb. I can easily see why this work of wonderful art won GOLD! Congratulations!

    I wish you the best in this contest as well. BRILLIANT!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • The Dark Writer
    November 14

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    interesting

    Douglas Hofstadter's book discusses this type of media (Gödel, Escher, Bach) I haven't read it personally but have been told its an interesting read.


  • sinfull
    October 2

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    There is more going on in your pen and in this picture than meets the eye. So many hidden layers in both. And perfect marriage...who better to write an appropriate verse for this dizzy picture than you! This is one of my new fave's...ty!!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    September 20

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    So skillfully, artistically,
    you wend the rhymes
    in Escher mind-bending style.

    You capture the simulated
    never-ending appeal of the
    up and down staircases,
    the puzzles for the eye.

    Quite an accomplishment.

    M-C

  • Excellent Jonathan
    The rhythm was something else, something I'll likely find stuck in my head for several days......

    However, the last cluster of rhyme I think could use a change, but it's fine too.
    @};---K

  • Jonathon Robbin! I loved your entries, I must say your by far one of the best poets i've ever had the pleasure of reading ones poems! Thank you oh so much for this entry, and I must say your a very accomplished poet!


  • spiritraven
    June 23

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    Very well done

    The background was a little distracting. The words were great, good flow, good imagery (in the words) and overall I really enjoyed the read.
    Thank you so much for sharing

  • wow!! first off, i love how you decorate the poem with all those pictures and that awesome topsey turvey background!! i love the poem, that rhyme scheme is just amazing, it really wowed me. i love the heaps of words rhyming with together!! wow.

    and that gold trophie well deserved!!

    well done

    -Lady Michaella-
    xx -_- xx

  • cool page, very puzzle-ish

  • mwzephyr
    June 22

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    ok

    I liked your ideas and even will go with your of rhyming but the presentation with the background and all confuses the otherwise interesting poem.
    It makes it quite diffucult to follow.
    Poem good, background not good.


  • aanika
    June 22

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    oh, i love the way you do rhyme!
    usually i'm not a fan of it because people rhyme like, 'cat' and 'hat'
    but you did it well and i really enjoyed this poem

    good write.

  • deop gold member
    June 22
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    Creative

    I enjoyed the journey, but the rhyming pulled me away from the content.


  • Aalta
    June 21

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    great background ... catches the eyes.
    great rhyme scheme and rhythm... i really love the form of the poem...a very fine write


  • Wolfdog silver member
    June 21

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You always express your ideas quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. Intriguing background.

  • interesting. makes my head spin. the rhyme scheme makes me feel as if i'm moving in circles

  • I believe I have commented on this before but the page is even more amazong and the poem still fascinates with its complex structures.


  • LadyRay
    June 21
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    By God

    You are truly a genious. This is beyond breathtaking


  • EbonyQueen48
    June 20

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    extremely beautiful, I love your choice of background, it shows versitility and creativity, great write!!

  • This is brilliance


  • ItaloEtkin
    April 24
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    wow.. this is genius... it works with the prompt..


  • talitha cumi
    April 9

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    Your natural ability is evident in rhythm, rhyme and wording. The background only adds to the mesmerizing feel. Much enjoyed

  • jadeangyal
    December 15, 2008

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    Your poem is as hypnotizing and convoluted as Escher's drawing. A virtual encyclopedia of all things rhyming and flowing. I don't think it could have been described better.


  • Snow-Flake
    July 30, 2008

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    I just discovered GEB. And am meaning to read it. This poem is fantastic. I love the writing, great work.


  • whos my humblepie
    June 26, 2008

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    At first, I was really enjoying the poem, Very much!!

    'ever onwards as the aisle in;
    paints life's canvas sixth sense herding;
    backwards grinding, from behinding,'

    ↑↑I was going to say that these three lines should be worked on or removed, but I realized that your poem was a lot longer.
    All I could focus on was the rhyme.
    Any point being made was lost in rhyme.

    As I said I was enjoying your poem, then I realised I needed a bathroom break.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 3, 2008
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    In the maze of ladders reaching ...

    swift ascending be descending
    into inner chambers leading
    unto outer landings creeping
    be the windows doors aflooring
    be the storeys flats galoring
    wait the lovers for enslavement
    freed the secrets from entrapment

    ...


    • Jonathan ROBIN
      June 3, 2008

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      into inner chambers leading

      M any moon moods Hiawatha
      Y ears perfecting for mind's coffer
      R eeling spent for rhyming message
      A ntic also merry presage
      T hat might herald open entry
      A bsent secrets, absent sentry,
      A s through panes all pain dissolving
      L ight solutions solving, solving ...


      • myrataal silver member
        June 3, 2008

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        Joy's salvage in words' teasing

        O ffers found in poet's chevage
        N umbers count in steps of staircase
        A mbush turned to dance in slow pace
        T ravel of a soul in motion
        H esitant on power potion
        A rticulate a phrase in magic
        N eutralize a spell in tragic


  • Xqzt
    May 5, 2008
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    In spinning rooms entangled... how confusing... how impressive!


  • who iam
    April 7, 2008

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    Long but flowing

    Initially i was dizzy but as the story evolved I settled in,Good write,as it seems to be about life!


  • PerVirtuous
    April 7, 2008

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    I see lots of references to Escher, but not many to Bach or Godel. The book was about the mathematics of recursive self-referencing patterns. I really don't see much mention of that. Am I missing the metaphors?
    It is a very good poem for the picture.


    • Jonathan ROBIN
      April 7, 2008
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      Responsum

      The self referencing dimensions of the poem, set within a context of unusual if not unique rhyme and rhythm ARE the Eternal Golden Braid - and thus you will find implicit music of Bach while at the same time the spiral could continue ad infinitum.


  • Travel Notes
    April 7, 2008

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    Glorious Rhythem!

    Very well structured. It seems like it could go on forever spiraling through time completely ageless. But your backround does make it rather confusing to read other's comments!


  • TheMinstrel
    April 7, 2008
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    WOW

    Art is its verbose way, shows what the artist of light and shadow felt in the painting. I love it!


  • CountryCousin
    April 7, 2008

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    The structure.

    The structure was deeply interesting and I can see how someone would get lost in it. This is the best collection of words that I have seen. However I got tired, too long a day at work. But you sure can make an interesting poem.

  • hscopazzi
    April 7, 2008
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    Maybe...

    Its because I have ADD but I cannot read this with this background!

    Harmony


  • creationsfromheart
    April 7, 2008

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    This is an amazing write and the rhyme flow is wonderful and the stanza are perfect as they lead from one to the next, as I read this I could even see Escher doing many of his master peices of art work, I recently became familur with him from another contest on here and admire his work and you for sure put it all in this write it is an extrodianry write with out a doubt!


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 7, 2008
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    my first impression is, to wish I was reading it on paper to allow me time to deconstruct and reconstruct it several times for starters! The rhyme scheme is brilliantly controlled and the rythmn builds from stanza to stanza, as unrelenting as the perpetual motion of never ending escalators, moving up and down, in and out and sometimes through. There! how did I do?
    'humour with perspective lending
    leading where uncondescending?'
    I will have to put you on my favorites list just to be able to revisit and reread!


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    April 7, 2008

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    Wow this is a really long piece. I will have to come back and finish reading it. From what I read, I liked.


  • Lily of the Valley
    April 7, 2008

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    Amazing ...

    As on canvas, outing, inning,
    every level underpinning
    exits, entrances rolls spinning
    out with no precise beginning.

    This poem reminds me of life, always striving to move onwards and upwards but the path is a maze which never quite reaches the intended target. The rhythm and rhyme in this piece do however reach their target with fine precision and the content provides a lot of food for thought.


  • Wilted Rose Bush
    April 6, 2008

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    fantastic

    great beat, rhyming and structure

    and a great take on the prompt

    i really loved this piece and the background just adds to its greatness

    well done, good luck and thanks for entering

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