Love's essence captured within webbed words
key to unravel codes to free
the riddle from its prophesy
in nests or traps for prey
could spider spin
attachment's
'mazement?
Author notes
(Duette)-- a primarily self-created type usually written:
in free or blank verse, mildly cryptic or obscure in content that concludes with an open question or statement.
*Form contains 5-7 lines with numbers of words or syllables in this line sequence:
first - 9 syllables words:
second - 8
third- 7-8
fourth-6-7
fifth- 3-4
(if 6-7 lines)
sixth- 2-3
seventh- 1-2
© Zealberry Duette
I implemented Frame B -- Syllables
GraphicArt: By Poet -- Spider Caught
In a list
A contest entry
- Write A Duette - LAST WEEK! Readers are required! by CookieZeal.
975 points, ended May 16, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I took bronze. congrats on the gold! -
Well deserved gold here, if I could applaud again I would
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This is very cool, I see a few things here that struck me immediately. Sacred geometry is something that came to mind, as I feel it contains the key to love's essence.
I also feel it could be about people that have lost hte ability to communicate, and looking for a way to unravel this web/blockage.
Excellent work though, lots of food for thought here.
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Due to my mistake in setting up the contest, I have corrected the Frame types which would make yours a "B" style. Since it was my typo , I assumed the 'syllable' designating it as such. Not to worry.
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They spin their webs to catch the wicked among us; but they eat what they catch...
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I am constantly amazed by your diversity of talent and your ability to see the true nature of what life has in store for us. Again, good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Brilliantly detailed and a perfect example of the character of the duette form.
I have at least 2 interpretations:
~ I see that this could be the actual weave of the spider. It shares with the reader the inevitable strategy of its life and what its demise will be.
~ This could also be societal. The spider is also predator within authorities, positively or negatively referenced.
~ It can also mean the entrapment OR attachment of a love relationship, albeit, indeed, a 'mazement'.
Terrific!
The question in the end still leaves the answer'open'. Very tight and smartly written.
*Suggestions*
Due to the airy flow of this form, I think
it would go better without too much punctuation and any capital letters at the beginning of a line 5.
The first line needs just ONE MORE syllable to meet the required 9. I'm sure you can figure one in.
Thank you so much for entering and I sure wish you the best. You're a good writer.:
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i do not think i have come across this form before
ah webbed words, love is like a fly, stuck to language, a good poem
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