Time is a closing door...
dimly searching far horizon
fading dawn and morning deferred,
open eyes as darkness crept from all sides
'til a single circle of light
embellished lasting hold
on dwindling moments, slippery sands
only yesterday, there was yet a tomorrow;
and men wandered short of their aim
to have more, but creation was not the partner
of their love;
and life never changed so much as
when gleams faded away, the loss of approaching day;
“why”, rose as a choking breath
and escaped as a sigh.
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A contest entry
- Sighing by CarolDesjarlais.
900 points, ended April 6, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - contest. by Melissa Gayle.
500 points, ended April 15, 14 entries
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Wow. Its amazing to me how you can paint such stark reality with such beautiful color. This is a wake up call to live, to experience--but it comes across as as soothing warning, not a harsh one. One that is the natural outflow of QW.
I loved these lines especially:
only yesterday, there was yet a tomorrow;
and men wandered short of their aim
to have more, but creation was not the partner
of their loveIt is a sad-- the thought of wasting away the days in search of something, when, if we will embrace what we were created to do and be, perhaps the light that is yet coming through the door would shine that much more brightly so that we could see exactly what it is that we need.
Beautifully done.
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this is lovely, soft.
it reminds me of those calm beach days, sitting on the porch and simply watching life.
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Wow!
Words can not express how breath takingly good this poem is, i truley have no idea what to say excpet that it is an exceptional example of writing
brilliant
keep up the good work
xxx shivy xxx
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reminds me of an hour glass, slipping by and just watching it in slow motion...... time asks many questions of us, yes.....
a lovely piece of work
G.x
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Masterful Write
How well I know this sigh....excellent write! Novy
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*Sigh* This is pure beauty, and those last two lines are just astonishingly poignant.
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Oh man.....
"but creation was not the partner
of their love;
and life never changed so much as
when gleams faded away, the loss of approaching day;
“why”, rose as a choking breath
and escaped as a sigh."
Do I ever knwo this sigh well....
How thoughtfully you pen such sigh...
If there ever was an answer, it escaped me back a whiloe ago, but now, the NOW knows why...soemthing to define us...
Really well written. I am going to have trouble judging all these magnificient poems for such fine pen hands.
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