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The Window Watcher

There's a man who sits at my window
Everyday and every night
His head leans upon the gilded pane
Fingers drumming like the rain
Slender, pale and white

There's a man who sings at my window
Everyday and every night
His breath fogs up the casement
Voice misting at its placement
Deeply soft and quiet

 

There's a man who stares out my window

Everyday and every night

His eyes gaze through the silvered glass

Over the trees and fields they pass

Whether sky be dark or light 

 

There's a man I watch at my window
Everyday and every night
I keep watch of that form that fades

Ever so softly in the morning light

For He sits and sings at my window

Misting and fogging that window

Staring out the casement

Everyday and every night 

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-Softly Singing

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  • islekine gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    This is well penned.

    The way I read it, he is talking about himself...
    not sure if that's how you meant it? You have caps in a few places that break the flow, but overall, wonderful write!
    Best wishes!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    Very nicely done, it reads so smoothly. You have told a great tale, spooky. A superb piece, good luck in the contest