Teardrops balance ever precariously
On the stable tips of bloody fingers
A pink tint dances across
The clearest aqua globe
Sparkling like fire in sunset light
Fingers rise just the slightest
Raindrops fall to her palms
Bloody tracks left in their wake
Trickling into the lines of her hands
Little rivers of fortune and gloom
The rivers flow off into the ocean
A darker shade of pink overflowing
Its molding white enclosure
Onto slippery tile beaches
Their designs magnified by the water's power
None of it seems to be seen
By blurry eyes, stinging with clear tears
As an arm is raised to examine
The damage done to underground rivers
Thus the raindrops roll down further
Submerging themselves in dark red glory
Perfect ruby pearls floating in the ocean
Jumping ship to journey over the edge
Carried on their simple quest
Crossing rivers and islands to the light
That shines just barely on the horizon
Pink water leaks out into the heavens
The ruby pearls follow, shining brightly
Vivid like crystallized raindrops
Fresh from a living's dying eyes
Vigilant angels found the tiny drops
Stopping to witness their story
That lay behind the locked door
They witnessed a scene not so epic
A fairytale princess staring lifeless
Her pink kingdom stood still
No liquid left to spill
To color the world as she wished
An almost bemused smile fell on still lips
The sharks hadn't been drawn quick enough
Teardrops crash on decaying fingertips
Tainted by the rotting flesh
Painted by the infernal pink shine
Of water and red wine
Of little slips with sharp objects
The teardrops cry, her frown on their ruby faces
Author notes
I liked writing it in the beginning, but towards the end I was getting a writer's block but didn't want to abandon it
Honest opinions please =)
A contest entry
- BLOOD STAINED TEARS (SUICIDAL LOVE) by Candy Morphine.
300 points, ended June 11, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oogle.
Gave me chills.
Loved it so much.
Loved it all...trying to find a favorite stanza but I can't cause I loved it all so much it was just so amazing and im gonna stop rambling now
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I liked it. The way you really manipulated all those adjectives was so good. I loved it!
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this is really greatly written!
meh screw writers block this ended perfectly!!!
the metaphors and imagery you used was stunning!
i felt like i was really there, watching.
it was very dark and emotional and thats exactly what i wanted
well done and all the best for the contest -
i know how writer block is but it turned out wonderful u had me from the begining! i loved it..every word was sooo..amazing..and deep..great job
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This is very good, the overall picture that this poem paints is glorious. The wording is great.
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Oh my word! This is such a powerful poem and the words and imagery used are simply amazing! Great write, I loved the whole thing! You rock! -Liz
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I had to reread it to get the full effect and absorb the emotion....
but in doing so I felt a harshness ...cold within that darkness dead center of one's soul.
but then life reaches in that place sometimes doesn't it? and in doing so reminds one of realities that some don't want to confront.
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great write
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This is a good write, a bit sad, but still good
You usually have more metaphors in your poems, but still a good write!!!
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Awwww!! Sisshy!! This is soooo good. Kinda sad in a way. Great write! I really, really liked it! Great write and keep it up!
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