Oblique
like ions
dense~
and formless
your light,
your inner beauty
dances through me
transparant, charming
you form yourself about me
in warmth
envelope me even
like alpha waves, like gamma
I was nothing but darkness
before you shined on me
before you hugged me
in a tender glow
and you?
my light
you pulled me out of the darkness
shrouding my humble bones
Author notes
Image:Nude women dancing in red by Deviantart-ricedryer
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A contest entry
- A Duel of Poets (1) Invite only! by Beating.
450 points, ended April 12, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm fascinated! From the minute I started reading this, I was pulled in. It just felt so fragile and so tender, it was almost too much. Just almost. You people are making this judging too hard!
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The feeling in this poem is something that everyone can relate to i think. -
Wonderful poem && image!
Awesome job!!
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Beautiful write. So many layers and so much meaning. It is one that requires repeated readings.
Thanks.
CaliOkie
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an exquisite take on a lovely picture prompt
love the way you express the light within the colour and the warmth within the fabric
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Oh my! Such a lovely piece to go with this very lovely image. You paint the most incredible pictures with your words!
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a great poem about the restorative power of letting beauty into one's heart ... you show thru your wonderful imagery that in accepting that grace, one falls in love with, well everything.
the image is beautiful ... the two merged women look like a glowing star.
thanks, as always.
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