She packed her bag and took off
RUnning out the door without looking back
After she knew they were gone
She slowed down but didnt unpack
She walked slowly onwards
On the railroad track
Knowing so well
She could never turn back
Shell find a new name
Shell find a new place
Get some money
And hopefully people will give her some space
She seems to not fit in anywhere
Either arguing or running out
Either ending with a slap in the face
Or screaming and shouting
Shed do anything to find where she belongs
She just wants someone to get her
To understand her way
And be simple not having to much or not enough to say
Maybe she can find it where she winds up now
If not running away has always worked
But how many names can she go through before
She finds herself all alone sitting in the dirt
Author notes
I thought of this while looking at the picture and then watching the so small video by carrie underwood when the girl runs out so yeah hopefully you all like it
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt. by Megy206.
425 points, ended April 25, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Watcha think dudes
Comments
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A good take on the prompt.
Some bits flowed better that others, but you presented a strong story about a girl who runs away and has nowhere that she truly calls home.
My favourite stanzas were the 2nd and 3rd ones:
'She walked slowly onwards
On the railroad track
Knowing so well
She could never turn back
Shell find a new name
Shell find a new place
Get some money
And hopefully people will give her some space'
These two stanzas flowed and rhymed really well and explained the most for me.
Good luck and thanks for entering.
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