What sombre thoughts must turtles think
When, with awkward step and gait
They lumber forth to lay their eggs
Within the baking sands of fate
A hundred shells, a hundred heads
And still yet a hundred more
Above a host of avid eyes
How many make it from the shore?
With easy pace and stately grace
'Neath waves, a life serene
What complex thoughts must turtles think
What secrets must they glean?
A contest entry
- Turtles by MagicLady.
475 points, ended April 8, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I imagine the journey is quite perilous. I enjoyed this bit on turtles. Nature themes always capture my interest. Well done and thanks for sharing.
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Do turtles think sombre thoughts? Or does it just seem that way because they're cursed with a large wrinkled appearance and slowness that implies stupidity? I have the same problems myself, but I'm fairly upbeat
But then I don't have to lay hundreds of eggs the size of footballs on a beach. Maybe your right after all 
I'm back
be afraid
be very afraid
Kat
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snap, me too. Welcome back, I tremble in awe
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I liked your take on this photo, even though these were not sea turtles. Not sure, but I think the eggs of these turtles will be gobbled up by fish. Thanks for your entry.
Cheryl
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cheryl, you're getting too technical
birds will swoop in to eat the fledgling young too.
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This write has quite a heroic tone. They are dignified creatures and you have written well about the serious nature of the way they propagate. It must really be something to see and reflect upon.
jjj
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beautiful poem
I like this but we both know that you can create a masterpiece with this topaz. I think turtles are a great topic to write about and I think you pulled it off rather nicely too. I feel you focused to much on the intimate feeling you were having and pushed them out to quickly.
Increasing the length of your poem and editing while you do so would be a great idea, I love your lengthy writes.
As I had said it's a beautiful poem.
It would be sweeter if the length was increased.
honeyrobyn
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Very nicely written
You are indeed a true poet, I enjoyed the rhyme, rhythm, and the image painted with your words, so often poetry gets lost in a jumble of emotion with no technical skill, you have retained a nice flow, while telling a story. Very nice...Diane
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