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| So consumed in life and what it brings that we’ve forgotten how to live. Rather, we merely observe. What is the master plan? Society’s pawns; wandering, lost. Tomorrow's fading dream.
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Author notes
I chose Option 1. and my song is 'Slip Slidin Away - Paul Simon'
Lyrics:
http://www.lyricsdepot.com/paul-simon/slip-slidin-away.html
youtube video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nKxyoud_c-E&feature=related
Image credits: http://mrcool256.deviantart.com/art/Pathway-to-the-Sun-81957579
***This poem is my first try at a Nonet. The rules for the form can be found here: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/nonet.html***
In a list
A contest entry
- As The Music Plays & Stops by Kari.
600 points, ended April 11, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If there's a mistake in the form, let me know this was harder then it looks!
Comments
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Very, very clever! A well deserved gold. (hmm, I really should experiment with more forms myself).
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Gold Worthy !
(There are "moments" I softly hum that Paul Simon song to myself!)
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thank you!
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Holy cow that is awesome!! I love the way the text got smaller as if fading away...
Well deserved gold!
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Wonderful
Great creation for the contest. Congrats on your gold.
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Well done
This was really outstanding!!! I love how you faded the words! you are such a bright girl!
Congratulations on the Golden trophy. I would also award you GOLD. The pick is so beautiful!
WELL DONE
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Not only is this a stunning masterpiece but the form just lends itself to the beauty of your words!!! Fantastic!!! I love it!!! I will have to try one of these forms myself!! Congrats on the shiney it was very deserved!!
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Oh i love the way u wrote this poem. and the structure is amazing. the picture went well with the poem too. love ur profile btw Please comment some of my poems thanks x
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omgosh love the layout, and everything that you've done with this poem..totally brillant! Thanks for your entry
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I've never heard of a nonet before, but this was pretty awesome. I can't tell you if there's anything wrong with the form, but the way you had the text shrinking throughout the poem was highly effective & actually relevant.
"Society’s pawns
wandering; lost" --
Here, I think it might read better with a comma after both "pawns" and "wandering," but that's just a personal preference, so ignore me if you will
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hmm... Very interesting way to write. I love how it fades away... It has a wonderful effect upon my eyes. Your words are flawlessly chosen, and beautifully penned.
Wonderful
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