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Cosmic Seduction



Spindrift surf silently rolls in, tantilizingly touching the farthest nerve,
spray of solace, heavenly anthem, embraces spiritual learning curve.

Allow me to touch you, just once, oh priceless, mellow moon
follow the softness, ochre reflection, of celestial, timeless dune.

Brightness you emenate, limitless experience, the promise you tenderly hold,
as sepia light kisses curving waves, embracing nature's idylic, designer mould.

Radiance from immenent new born star,  resemble orchids in a flower bed ,
covered in filigree, knitted closely together, as one, like newly weds.

Comets compete with awesome milky way, like a couple in the bloom of youth,
moon and stars in magnificient bridal gowns, aspiring in radiance and truth.

Reaching fingers send whispering shadows, across a gradual evening sky,
glides past like subtle etchings, as mother earth groans... then softly sighs.

 



 

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  • RuthKephart
    April 25, 2008
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    Just back for another look before final judging
    Ruth


  • Amera gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    This is a delight to read, your imagery is wonderful inhanced by your amazing vocabulary. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • NeonRose
    April 6, 2008
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    Beautiful images here, and I love the title. Good luck in the contest.


  • RuthKephart
    April 6, 2008
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    Great use of rhyme
    Ruth


  • Emile
    April 6, 2008

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    Good

    Your poem captures the charm of nature in its purity as part of this beautiful planet. A good interpretation of the wonders nature provides leaving a calm tranquil feel to your poem that is pristine in content and intent. Very imaginative use of words and skillfully constructed. You use good imagery and maintain a poetic flow throughout the whole piece.

  • RuthKephart
    April 5, 2008

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    Great illiteration in this piece, especially in the first several lines and good use of imagery and your word choice is superb. Since this is a rhyming contest I do have to point out the lack of rhyme between
    web/weds
    and seduce/truth
    I liked the use of the word mould here, there will be those, I'm sure, who think this is simply a typo. Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest
    Ruth

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