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You are the Air I Chew

I refuse to lay on my stomach
You defacing my spine
And shoulder blades

Barricade my avenue
And I’ll tear you from the throne
Dewdrops of blood
On the soles of my vengeful feet
You as the new carpet

Like Hera, I will drive you to madness,
My dear Heracles
Corrupt mortal
Drunk off your own power
To climb the pyramids
And destroy the shape of light

You will curse karma
When you once laid between her legs

Down on knees
Harlot bowing to my crown

I will drink in a silent revenge
Like a desert fiend to rain clouds


Author notes

Don't know if this is what you were looking for but I tried... I'll probably write another piece for this, something better.

It's personal but I listened to several NIN songs while I wrote this.

-Sanctified
-Sin
-The Hand that Feeds
-Survivalism
-And basically the whole Downward Spiral CD

I lovelovelove you LaLaLauren!

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I think people should go play in traffic. fucking assholes.

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  • Lauren Noir
    May 4, 2008

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    Yes.Yes.Yes.Yes.YES

    I loved the range of songs and I saw little snippets of each, I got the all-over feel of the whole montage of songs. It made it se varied, so interesting

    I loved the idea of Mythology, that was nice.
    Next there wad the amazing influence of the themes of sex and such...well dirty things (to put it in my naive sense)
    It just made it inspired by the songs you chose a whole lot more, which made me appreciate the poem in a new light.

    Even before that; it's stunning

    Good luck
    Thank you
    And well done!


  • vampira1665 silver member
    April 8, 2008

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    I love NIN. I read this and, honestly, was not sure of my thoughts on it.....Until I read your author notes. Then most of the lines made sense.

    Love you daughter,

    Mom


  • Living-Out-Loud
    April 6, 2008
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    Love it. Enjoyed the mythology in it and I love NIN so much, Good write. -paint


  • Its-Deja-Vu
    April 6, 2008

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    ah i love that song survivalism.... by nin...

    "You will curse karma
    When you once laid between her legs"

    fucking awsome line.... ^_^
    this is a very rough poem. like teeth grinding to sand kind of poem.. lots of emotion. well thats what i got from it at least. haha
    radical stuff. (yaah teenage mutant ninja turtles moment!!... im a looser >.<)

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