Life is something that plagues us;
The laughter sometimes is less than the cry.
But death always lasts forever,
And that's too long a time.
Author notes
Prompt: "Life can't last forever, make the most of it while you are still around." - Corrine.
Don't know if this is what you are looking for, my poems tend to be epics, so I just tried my hardest with this one.
A contest entry
- Charla and Corrines Quickie by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really liked this piece. It makes me think and want to share my thoughts on it.
First off..life is over-rated
and yes sometimes it does seem as though her cry more then we laugh. So sad!
Now death....it does not last forever, for some of us that are unlucky enough to keep coming back over and over and over again.
Very nicely done!
vampi
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Wow this is beautiful.
It's short but so powerful it really moves the reader, you have said more in 4 lines than what some could in 50.
I love the ending lines, simply beautiful.
Best of luck in the contest you have entered!
Arc-En-Ciel--x -
very unique take on the prompt. i just love your second line, sad but true but so fitting for this. best of luck. be well and be blessed
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