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Words,
suffice hearts

[for a temporary fix]

till lies are shut

suffocating in jars

till truth shines

and I see,

I'm still in hell

 

         alone.

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prompt: promises are sensible untill you shut the door and your alone once more- char

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    April 5, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt, you have a powerhouse ending. Best of luck in the contest.

    ♥
    whisper


  • aboomer silver member
    April 5, 2008

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    I think this is an excellent take on the prompt! Love your wording - for just a few words, you've packed a lot of depth into them.
    Great job!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • HeavenScent4U
    April 5, 2008

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    This is so sad and sounds like it might be a little personal and makes me really feel for you. so much emotion spilled on this page. wonderful take on the prompt. best of luck. be well and be blessed


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 5, 2008
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    Good luck!