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All into One

 
 
 
 
In Shadow:
 
 
 
 
My words ran dry, useless in silence.
Birds told to fly... though 
while I stood in 
defiance.
 
 
 
Left in the 'Sheer', cold hole
 once held warm, grasps
for anything clear?!
All feeling's 
been torn.
 
 
Hollowed
 
not even small hunger.
Nothing more...
is there, to live for any longer?

 

 

 


 

 

"How can I  be?"

This

dread
final question... 

haunts living-dead pain,

Meets no light in darkness

 

 

 

 "How can I possibly ever be happy again?

 

"Can I possibly, be happy again?!

 
   "Can I ever be happy?"
 
 
 
 
So-Much-to-Save's, useless clutching at air
now has to brave, what Real is there?
Proposals demolished, complete.
There is now only 'One'

 

 

 

 
Now go wash your feet!

 

 

 

Half-light:

 

 

 

 

Heart
 
desperate for beauty
seeing such, tears in the rain,
is left only the duty to treasure such pain.
 
 
  
Sensed 
beyond shrouds: 
your own lost goal,
converse with clouds, your 
pivoting 
soul...
 

 

Under shouting far more
than you may at first
hear, till choosing
the 'doorway'...
Departing
from
fear...

 

May 

not want 

to hear? Fool!

thing if you don't!

Grieve for many years

... or find 'Heart' that wont!

... Except when made deaf, 
by your holding your 
misery, your habit,
your oldness
'what'ness'
in false
pride.
 
 
 
 
 
Light:

 
 
 
Make your heart 'mad'! 
Cook 'whole' in grief!
Drown in sad! 
till 'Beauty' is reached!


 
 
'Now',
is the 'door'!
to your secret place.
 One not to be ignored. 
 
 
 
"Now go wash your face!"

 

 

 

Truly,
Clearly
the Truth,
'Voice' heard
inside you! never
stops calling you home...

 
 
 
No: 
need close,
cut willy-nilly,
nor need to loose,
 
you are all possibility
 
 
 
Eat 
this 'fruit', 
Step this 'way'.
Heed not your boots, 
Never need for dismay...
 
 
 
 
 
 
Wash your hands face and feet.
 
 
Wash all of yourself!
 
 
 
 
 
Splash! 
 
 
 
Love:
 
 
 
'Walk'
 
certainly
in enthusiasm
into Love's New.
Knowing all Beauty
in 'One' is All, equally True.



'Be'
 
each
 moment's start,

 

 

 

(Through battle to be won...)

 

 

 

'Stay' 
 
with your heart,
inside's such a 'SUN'!
stay with your heart!
and
make all
into



'One'
 
 
 
 

Author notes

Experimental, Like paving stones on a path I once walked.

A contest entry

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  • lemon curd
    June 21

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    Can't make up my mind if I enjoyed the presentation or the excellent blurbs dotted around. Regardless the poetry was deeply felt and written with stealth precision.


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      June 21
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      Much thanks to you lemon curd... which I love by the way, especially when it's tangy!

      Interesting... unsure about the layout then?
      It was an experiment and most feedback has seemed to be good on that. It's great to have further opinions though, which is much appreciated.


      Sol

      • lemon curd
        June 21
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        I did like it for the art. I think poetry can be presented like this to add to it's beauty. I wonder if you are also a painter? Lemon curd is tangy and quite addictive

  • Velvet Rose Petals
    June 10

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    seems to me you have many brilliant words still left. This is such a heartfelt poem with longing of the lady. Simply beautiful how you put your words together. I also love the formatting.

    Good write, look forward to more. They are all so dee

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    June 8

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    Came back to enjoy this poem

    I just love the style and imagery..so clever and unique
    artistry! way to write!
    ears/Seattle

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    May 30

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    The energy in this is brilliant. It shifts, it gets loud and then lowers its voice. There is excitement as well. Perhaps at discovery of now .. this feels like riding out a panic attack to me. There is a knot there at the start...

    It is heavy, and leaves one in the throat as well, there is hopelessness there. But it eases into introspection and then seems to go headfirst and diving into now.

    And we clean
    and we splash
    and now

    we have fun..

    and then .. we move ahead, we go forward, we don't stop.

    You are very good at this. You should be paid for motivating people. I suppose in a way you are, your art does that, doesn't it?

    "'Now',
    is the 'door'!
    to your secret place.
    One not to be ignored."




    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      May 30
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      Thanks for so thoroughly 'walking it with me' Suzanne.

      I'm glad you liked its energy. Quirky though it is, as an experiment I'm still fond of it, partly because it is a bit of a diary for me.


  • rhondasail
    May 28

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    You may find this one word description strange, but I find this write to be...succulent. Wonderfully dense and full of flavors most never taste in such detail as you placed here. Lovely rebirth in Love, Truth, and Peace. I enjoyed walking the path...Peace to you, Rhonda


  • Lyndon gold member
    May 23
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    A devastating journey

    down a, well, unconventional page.
    Best wishes in this contest.


  • Lucy. gold member
    May 20

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    just revisiting and I think I got more out of this today than I ever have before. It's brilliant, really. And I would say one of your very, very best.
    Now, I'm going to go wash my face.

  • Elora Danon silver member
    May 20

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    I've come back several times to read this again and like Gill, each time I find something new, something I didn't see before. It's like a stream of consciousness, but with a purpose. You've done a wonderful job of putting all the 'little pieces' together, those inexplicable moments that make up our psyche and mold us into who we are.

    I'm sure I'll be back to read it over again several more times and each time will find something new to moon over.



    e~


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      May 20
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      Thank you,
      I'm so pleased that you found it this way. I couldn't help making a connection with this regarding matters of the heart, which your poem brought out.
      This one is directly related to my own time and journey from particularly feeling devastated and on reflection seeing ways in which it, though painful, also served a positive purpose. Much shaking up, self-gathering and change of perspective.

      Thanks so much for your reading and generous comment. Sol

      P.P. For what saying this is worth, I believe:

      Some hurt never completely goes away, but we are ever free to decide how we hold it and what we choose to continue keeping company with. Our universes to roam in are gigantic, and there is that in our make up which embraces them all! We must be Large because we've been invited to be.

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    May 7
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    That was incredible...

    and you described it so perfectly..the healing after
    grieving...and the importance of grieving to heal,
    and how we can stuck in the cracks inbetween.
    I myself had to seek out a grief counselor to help
    along the stepping stones you wrote out.........
    perfectly!
    wow! incredible poem!
    ears/Seattle


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      May 7
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      Thanks ears. This was written largely as an experiment, your comment means a lot to me and I'm intending to do some more in this style in future.

      Sol

  • Rheea gold member
    May 6

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    I really like this... except the part about calling you home... there is no home for some to be called home too... could you tell me what you meant here?
    I love the rest of it the flow is a wake up and yet comforting some how..


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      May 6
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      Hi, It's intended as the 'place' of real belonging, final destination, where you are essentially loved and all is at rest in Peace. Home means 'rightful place' to me and there always is one, otherwise we wouldn't be able to feel the lack of it when we do. Don't you think?

      Thanks for your sincere and helpful comment Sol
  • thinking-out-loud
    April 23
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    beautiful,
    it is amazing

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 23
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      Thank you, this was written and arranged as an experiment and your comment is much appreciated. Sol

  • NeonRose silver member
    April 17
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    Amazing! Never saw anything like this before. It's beautiful. Congratulations on winning Bronze.


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    April 10
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    Your comment was really interesting, still evaluating...

  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    April 10
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    OK. Never done this before this chat thing..

    Let's try. Very interesting comment genies..
    I will wait to hear from you so I know I'm not conversing with myself. Ha ha
  • genies
    April 10
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    hmmm. there are many voices in the poem - they seem to contradict each other or better, to be in opposition to one another. the harsh, imperative is always at the centre, mingling with the shadow self whispering in a child-like manner, asking the existential questions. this child's persona - if i may say so - is not only talking to itself but it is addressing the one persona which in the poem appears also at the centre but in the stanzas where there is the triangle - not the reversed triangle, though! the triangle which rests on its sides - thy pyramid shape is one of the masculine symbols. the persona which shouts imperatives is a motherly voice or more likely a step-motherly voice. the one who ''knows-it-al'' the stanzas at the side represent (to me) an opressed persona - a persona pressing itself to the wall, one who lost a dimension somewhere. So in terms of personas, the whole pallette of voices at the first glance leans to the negative side. however, the imperceptible trace of the innocent voice and the shadow truth somehow equalise the situation. still, however, i dont see the word 'one' as the final resolution - it is heavy, too domineering. the shadow dimension more successfully connects the poem (for me) =) Genie

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 11
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      Food for thought

      I just wanted to say thanks again, for giving me more food for thought.
      I will let you know what I do with it, if I may, when it happens. Sol

  • MissyMouse
    April 10

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    It goes so full circle. It's an undenyably deep read. I've never seen anything like it before. I love it. Keep it up.

    . Rewarded 4

  • genies
    April 9

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    the avantgarde - visual component of the poem creates the feeling of being ripped up, torn and tossed around, a good technique for the presentation of the disruption. I find it, however, a bit too long and heavy. the word which is supposd to collect the scattered bits - pieces of emotion to me somehow cannot hold all of it together. hmmmmm. what do you think? Sincerely, genies.

    . Rewarded 8


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 9
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      Yes! Very Perceptive. Yes!

      Your comment points so 'exactly' to the nature, not only of the 'task' which writing this presented, but very interestingly, the nature of the actual experience walked through. Your comment is 'Golden' and very gratefully received.
      It does not however expound all aspects, there is more; 'Perplexity' is a key component of this here, necessary agitation of the 'heart', in order to truly reach a state of 'abandonment' of ones previous state or 'smaller self' and enter the true 'Largeness' of the 'One'.
      This now, is like yet another attempt to fulfil the task of the 'poem/write'!
      It seems that there is no 'Realisation Pill' and we can only point or be pointed in a direction towards meanings, which are beyond the relative ie the 'Heart of the Matter', something which only direct experience (Taste) will ever reconcile with our relative states of suffering.
      And 'of course', because the whole meaning of such experience is precisely for the purpose of arriving at this without substitute!
      Until such 'conversation' can take place on the level of this meaning, we can only allude to..., not encapsulate. This is where we can take heart though, because having understood and tasted by degrees the Reality of all this, our 'suffering' (distance from Truth) is transformed into a real meaning, to hold on to, even treasure. It is a presence of 'Love' which can guide us to the 'Unimaginable Beauty' of this 'Truth in Oneness' which is the goal in all of this. Something far beyond the attempts and desires of reconciling our own immediate conditions into the familiarly comfortable. When this is tasted truly, all is of less weight and matter, like small fry in the face of Majesty.

      None of this changes the fact, that the poem will always be lacking, incomplete, merely a sign post for such a journey, and which no doubt has much room for improvement, especially in the face of all this. I am still merely trying.
      Thank you so much for your comment, which I hope has opened up further understanding and possibility of true unlimited, spiritual meaning, in our lives. Yes, a 'Cure All' ever in potential AND can actually be met with the real potential in ourselves.

  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    April 9

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    Amazingly effective with the spacial arrangement yes... but the color, the way the blue visually connects to things that are cooler, colder, more distant, alone, sad.. and the coming in from the darkness at the beginning to the white at the end that sits strikingly against the back..

    and all that without the immensity of the words..
    which sit like a star on the page in the middle of all that ..then begin to explode... like a light


  • Dana rose
    April 8
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    very good i like it a lot

  • Noah20Tymatal
    April 8

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    Steps taken by many my friend. Be be enlightened by the spirit one must be one with the spirit. You have achieved a goal we all strive for. Thank you for the invitation into Spirit. An offer I will never refuse.
    Peace in light and love. If you desire critique my english is poor at best but there are plenty of people here on AP qualified to oblige..
    Noah


  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 8

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    every day, I find something new in this piece to hold onto.....

    i like the subtle changes too ... you did good

  • faithwhisperer silver member
    April 7

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    Creative!

    I really like the way you set this poem up...very unique! I also like the thoughts that you are sharing here and appreciate your feelings! Thanks for your entry! Don't respond yet, as I'm trying to keep this contest anonymous please! Bean Buyer

  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 7
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    thank you

    - smiles.......

    i do like this one, it has grown on me

  • Dreanne
    April 6

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    Hey Sol, what a fantastic write! I love this! The layout kept me always wondering what was coming next, just as on the path you walked, none of us can ever really know what is going to happen next...

    This is a wonderful reflection of a journey forward into tomorrow, very emotional and inspirational...

    Again all the best in the contest, a piece deserving of great credit...

    Sam


  • vanessa reen gold member
    April 6
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    This is such an amazing write. I really love the layout of this, it is so unique, and one that needs to be read slowly to let all the meaning in. You have some amazing lines here, ones that I will have to read again and again. Well done for this and all the best for the contest.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Lucy. gold member
    April 6
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    This is beautiful Sol. I can see that I will need to come back and read it many times. I love the way you have laid it out. The wording is beautiful and, as usual, you have a unique knack of making certain lines feel so inspirational, motivational, positive - I think it's your very effective use of exclamation marks.
    I don't know why you think this needs more work, I think it's perfect. Needing to be read many times to grasp it all, certainly, but perfect nonetheless.
    I thoroughly enjoyed. X


  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 5
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    back again.....
    every time i read this, i find a new layer to unravel and hold onto... it is true, we should all BE more to ourselves and to others, that is where truth and beauty can be found. Within the being of integrity and honesty........

    this piece is making my brain itch... and I'm surely going back to bed to scratch it and ponder about dreams and life...



  • a woman to love gold member
    April 5
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    Such an awesome piece. There is a precise cut to the pull and thrust of your words. I very much enjoyed traveling on this lyrical journey with you.

    . Rewarded 4


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 5

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      Always such an honour and pleasure to have you as guest (and) A woman to love. Thank you, now I surely know I did right to list this!
      So the format isn't too disjointed then?

      • a woman to love gold member
        April 5

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        It was different and I like that. This piece forces the reader to pay attention to what you have to say. I would liken the expereince to like being struck by lightning. We as people in a whole need to wake up. And I personally love a challenge.
  • allie529
    April 5

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    Your words are sharp and well chosen. I particularly liked the stanza "Accept when made deaf,
    by your holding your
    misery, your habit,
    your oldness
    'what'ness'
    in false
    pride" The term what'ness is intriging to me, an ambiguous idea that we fill.

    I hate to be Nancy Negative, but I had difficulty following the words due to the jumping layout. I agree that it is lovely (visually) but I personially had trouble viewing the poem as a whole, as it seemed choppy and disconnected. *sorry!*

    . Rewarded 8


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 5
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      No apology necessary at all, it's great to have honest appraisals, just what it's all about in my book. Yours is very much appreciated and noted. I do intend to settle it in, a little more, kindly for the eye if I can. Thanks Sol

  • Gwenevere
    April 5

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    This poem takes us on a journey from darkness to light, walking over those paving stones of yours.It is good to be different and this is certainly good, Ros

    . Rewarded 4

  • ljk
    April 5

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    Blumin 'eck S...you get better each time I read your poetry. How d'you do it? You're sooooo expressive and imaginative. I wouldn't know where to begin!!
    [I don't understand how to award more clapping thingies. I'd give you more than than the two it's showing!!]

    . Rewarded 4


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 5
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      Diamond

      Three is great thank you! L you're a diamond! You don't think I'm off my rocker after all! I was a little concerned over this one. You've made me feel safe. Catch up soon. X
  • whoopie.x
    April 5
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    LOVE IT

    I LIKE IT. I LIKE HOW YOU MAKED THE POEM IN A CURLY SHAPE AND I ENJOYED YOUR POEM. KEEP WRITING


  • whn-dreaming-ends
    April 5

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    Oh wow! that is really all I have to say. You have done an amazingly wonderful job with this! the way that you laid out the page and than the poem it self...oh my gosh you are truely gifted! Absolutely amazing write and good luck in the contest.

    Sincerly,
    Toddy

    . Rewarded 6


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      April 5
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      Hi Toddy, I can't tell you how greatly your generous response is appreciated, really. I listed this with no idea if I'd be written off as a mad-man or not. Then I figured that surely this is what this site is all about, so we can share feedback and opinion like mirrors for each other. Any way, I'm so glad you came my way and much thanks to you. Sol

  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 5
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    I read this, over and over and have heard it too... and it makes me feel 'dirty' at first, as if I'm climbing up through a well, totally dark and lost, the pitfalls of life, the flowing of loss and grief... then it becomes apparent that there is more to this journey...

    I do like the layout, even for a staunch left sided writer as me... but I must admit it takes time to read, but that isn't a bad thing... as sometimes we need to take steps to read slowly and digest things..

    this one has guts, spillages and rawness, then it has the light, that holds the sun and in all of us, it lifts up.....

    what a challenge to be won!!

    this is soup Sol... you did good my friend

    yepp - wow!

    G.x

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