Under the sun you sit,
and wait for your love to return home.
Once home you will share in a night of
forgotten lovemaking,
Your body's are hot and burning with fire,
your screaming is heard clear across the road.
As he tares into you,
you beg him to go harder and faster.
your screaming slow down to a light moan,
you kiss his lips and start to love him all over again.
Under the sun you sit and wait for you love to return home...
Author notes
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A contest entry
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Comments
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very welled penned poem here i think you did a great excellent job here thanks for sharing and good luck to you in the contest
petal desires
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ooo... Very nicely done...
Wonderful poem
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There is a sense of life cycles in this by the way you open and end. It is almost as if this is not a course of passion and love as it is a course of life itself. I like the interplay of the universal with the personal. It gives it a spiritual undertone. There is a sense of fate in this that is almost karmic.
Love, Tom B.
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Very imaginative take on the picture selected. It is very intense indeed. I certainly can relate well to waiting for your love to return home. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I meant to applaud too!!!
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I love this!!
I loved the opening two lines..under the sun you sit..very visual..the rest very intense!!..great writing
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