Of loss you spoke -- and how it froze;
Of love that changed, from sun to snow,
The bubbling brook which from love rose,
Such passion which I, too, did know;
That freely flowed, hindered by nought
In this pure flow, its path it sought.
What wondrous glee your words recalled!
How blissful by your thoughts I'm touched!
What can I keep, from love withhold
In silence, that earlier was clutched
In admiration, adoration, pure and bold,
What is now mine? Shall I, like you, declare?
A sodden mire of willows bare.
A vault of love -- for love to hide --
Like you, I trust, it will be free:
What's wrong? if the heart is wide
But honest in its purity.
-- Such apathy, that from his soul arose
Hath wounded me with muted blows.
Author notes
Art: Carlo Dolci -- Allegory of Patience
Prompt: Option 2
I took William Wordsworth's poem A COMPLAINT, which he wrote because of a radical change in his friend, and mirrored his feelings in a poem that showed I can relate to the poet at that time in his life.
Structure: I kept close to the original poem in structure and in style, with each line capitalized, like in the original poem.
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A Complaint
There is a change—and I am poor;
Your love hath been, nor long ago,
A fountain at my fond heart's door,
Whose only business was to flow;
And flow it did; not taking heed
Of its own bounty, or my need.
What happy moments did I count!
Blest was I then all bliss above!
Now, for that consecrated fount
Of murmuring, sparkling, living love,
What have I? shall I dare to tell?
A comfortless and hidden well.
A well of love—it may be deep—
I trust it is,—and never dry:
What matter? if the waters sleep
In silence and obscurity.
—Such change, and at the very door
Of my fond heart, hath made me poor.
-William Wordsworth
In a list
A contest entry
- Poems For The Poet by raspberry.
1890 points, ended May 3, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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enjoyed it...remembered the poet once more through your wonderful lines...
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It's obvious a lot of hard work has gone into the marvellous work. A superb contest entry but also a wonderful poem to have in your own personal collection. A pleasure to read - Von~ Oldpoetry
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I applaud u for all the study you have done and the time u put into this.. this is really glorious!! Very well written, good luck!
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a good poem, ah it is always good to mirror emotions of others, to grab some poetry and see how you would speak, there is a great beat here in your poem, flowing along nicely.
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Beautiful
Very well done my friend. It goes perfectly with the prompt. Good luck with the contest. ~Peace~Gar
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I like the new ending even more than the original.
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Oh my! This is amazingly beautiful, filled with image and emotion. The flow and meter is perfect with the rhyme and slant rhyme. You are truly a poet's poet. Bravo!
Love,
Amera
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I think this is not your usual style but looks great. good luck dear friend.
~Sonja~
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A pleasant read and a welcome competition entry.
Good Luck.
Jim
PS please check that final line again. 2 ins?
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