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Yesterdays Dreams

Yesterdays Dreams 

 

 

 

Dreams lingering

as time slowly

slips though emptyness,

reaching, remembering

longings of the past,

Soft caresses

whisper softly,

gently on perfumed

skin in ecstasy

of anticipated

excitement welling

to extreme,

as it lingers,

breathless, floating

away as petals,

whispering,

falling on perfumed

skin of rose pink

fading away

at dawn.

Essence of yesterday

hopeless tomorrow.

Author notes

A dried rose petal and whiff of perfume bring memories that were once thought as forgotten .

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  • consternation imply
    July 23
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    WONDERFUL

    This is sensual and memorable of what everyone feels when they miss moment with someone that just might of been a soul mate.


  • GotLilt
    May 31
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    Very Poignant! Well wishes.


  • adsaige
    May 28, 2008
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    content: 20 grammar: 15 message: 10 revelence: 20 impact: 10 [75]


  • rainbow bi trinity
    May 21, 2008

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    this is totlly beautiful the whole set up was just magical oh great! good luck to you in the contest a pleasure to read


  • Unforgotten
    April 18, 2008

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    ...

    it was nice, a soft little lullaby, but i felt like so many of the phrases used have been used--petals floating, fading like dawn, soft caresses--all of these are just tired cliched phrases. I got the message, just didnt feel the sadness.

    -jps


    • SpiritMother
      April 18, 2008
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      You are probably correct in this critique, but there are times that cliches are the only tools that work within the poem. It was written not from sadness but a memory of times gone by yet still held in love.
      Thank you for the input.


  • LittleMoon silver member
    April 9, 2008

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    This really tugs at the heart strings. It is very lovely. Essence of yesterday hopeless tomorrow ends on a sigh of deep regret.


  • individuality gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    a good poem, the repetition worked well here i thought with the short lines, a gentle flow and rhythm to your poem


  • rbruce gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    An excellent expression of feelings that were there yesterday, are here today, and may be gone tomorrow. Just lovely.

  • midnightblue1272
    April 5, 2008
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    Beautiful.

    One of the most beautiful poems I ever read. Great imagery, great flow; just great!

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